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the facade
12-14-2011, 08:14 PM
My intentions are certainly not to offend anyone. So please forgive me for the crude imagery and if you already feel like this may not speak to you then read no further.

Gastric Romance

How fleeting her smile
and how quickly it twanged down,
from a bright set of teeth
to a white handle pulled.

Once, you were inside
and she felt you within
now you wonder what went wrong
as you spinal and whirl.

You moved through her
and she took all that she needed -
all that was good in you
like so many she'd eaten.

Then you see the light
at the end of a tunnel
and you're out,
flushed with fear.

She did not leave you in pieces
but rather relieved you like f……

Jerrybaldy
12-14-2011, 09:00 PM
lol facade. I feel that blankverse may have inspired you here. Never fear offence though.. it takes a few infractions til you are gone and I am still here :) I enjoyed it.

Jerrybaldy
12-14-2011, 09:01 PM
p.s sex is fine, never mention politics... you aint seen me .. right?

blank|verse
12-14-2011, 09:13 PM
Oh dear, I fear I may have lowered the tone. Actually, this isn't at all badly written; it's not inappropriately crude for the sake of it, and gets away with describing a sexual act in a way that doesn't make your toes curl, so that's an accomplishment in itself. Now what rhymes with 'fellatio'...?

Buh4Bee
12-14-2011, 10:27 PM
This was hysterical!

Little Gal
12-14-2011, 10:54 PM
Enjoyed the read... a lot of newness invented :)

hillwalker
12-15-2011, 07:35 AM
Now what rhymes with 'fellatio'...?

As Hamlet once said to Horatio,
"D'you fancy a bit of f........?"


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Bar22do
12-15-2011, 09:05 AM
and I thought she relieved him like a f.a.r.t ! am I stupid... how are you, The Facade!!!! I was looking for your on the beach yesterday afternoon (lurching along... :wave: ) while you were... f... I mean "... fancying foreign firls" somewhere downtown?