Ode to orthogonality

[sundarramchand]

Faces , melting like candles ,
Aglow with joy,
Rubbing against each other,
Like kissing and modulating shapes
Like the warmth of the jewel colored fireplace
Talk of “basis”
A maze of “soft” mirrors
Creating recesses that nurture and vibrate

Hail orthogonality !!

[hillwalker]

I'm not sure if the floating sentence at the end is part of the poem but the poem would do better without it. You've already said enough in the first 8 lines for the reader to feel the magic of 3D geometry without adding an extra coda complete with !!.

I enjoyed this but I can't fathom out why you put certain words in quotation marks - it's so pretentious.

H

[sundarramchand]

The aim is to recreate the magic, but of something subtler than 3d geometry.

Yes, i did think of removing the last line or grouping it with the others but left it as a poetic device for reinforcing a particular theme

[hillwalker]

Yes, i did think of removing the last line or grouping it with the others but left it as a poetic device for reinforcing a particular theme

But my point is that there was no need to reinforce anything.

Your poem states quite elegantly what you set out to say. Labouring the point by the addition of a banner headline at the end undoes all the craft you put into the piece. Have more faith in your poetic skills... the reader will reach the same conclusion but through the reading of the poem rather than from being given such an unsubtle hint.

H