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argha1991
12-13-2011, 07:27 PM
With Beauty personified,
abode welcomed…
Ringing, singing,
Celebrating symphony.

Enjoyed…

your hasty clamor skipped my vision.
Till that night I rediscovered my vociferous yelling…

Morpheus your days are over…

For I, identified
Sonority in her cacophony,
The yawps in themselves personify beauty.

:party::party:

cacian
12-14-2011, 04:14 AM
This is a cool read thank you argha.
I like these lines


your hasty clamor skipped my vision.
Till that night I rediscovered my vociferous yelling…

Morpheus your days are over…

wonderfull indeed.

Fellsman
12-14-2011, 06:28 AM
Morpheus is always a welcome visitor to my abode... it sounds a bit noisy for him in your neck of the woods...


An amusing write...

Fellaman

Hawkman
12-14-2011, 07:15 AM
I'm, not convinced you need to start with With, nor am I quite sure how abode welcomed. I feel you could use an article before abode. I'd also drop Till. In the last stanza you don't need a comma after I. The ellipses are over-used and add a layer of pretension as well as slowing the poem for the reader, But apart from this I rather like it. It conveys a vivid impression.

Live and be well - H

Little Gal
12-15-2011, 03:18 AM
tor joteo bote... lok jon... tai abar ghorana shomriddho:party::eek2::shocked::banana:

argha1991
12-15-2011, 03:19 AM
I'm, not convinced you need to start with With, nor am I quite sure how abode welcomed. I feel you could use an article before abode. I'd also drop Till. In the last stanza you don't need a comma after I. The ellipses are over-used and add a layer of pretension as well as slowing the poem for the reader, But apart from this I rather like it. It conveys a vivid impression.

Live and be well - H



thank you sir... thank you...
but believe me... i cant help breaking convention... sorry...
to depict what i perceive i can break anything through...
but once more thank you for your approach... :seeya:

argha1991
12-15-2011, 03:21 AM
Morpheus is always a welcome visitor to my abode... it sounds a bit noisy for him in your neck of the woods...


An amusing write...

Fellaman




pleasure...

argha1991
12-15-2011, 03:23 AM
This is a cool read thank you argha.
I like these lines



wonderfull indeed.




thank you dear... thank you...

argha1991
12-15-2011, 04:01 AM
tor joteo bote... lok jon... tai abar ghorana shomriddho:party::eek2::shocked::banana:




na re lokta kintu amar bhalo chay... chay je amr sense of grammar baruk ami punctuation er sothik byabohar sikhi... ityadi ityadi... :D :party::party::party::party:

kintu ami to sikhte chai na

Little Gal
12-15-2011, 04:04 AM
na re lokta kintu amar bhalo chay... chay je amr sense of grammar baruk ami punctuation er sothik byabohar sikhi... ityadi ityadi... :D :party::party::party::party:

kintu ami to sikhte chai na

hahahahah ei re... sense of grammar aar punctuation:cold::angel:????? issshhhhh lokta:rage: nirghat kothaukar frustrated professor:willy_nilly: re! :banana:

argha1991
12-15-2011, 04:06 AM
hahahahah ei re... sense of grammar aar punctuation:cold::angel:????? issshhhhh lokta:rage: nirghat kothaukar frustrated professor:willy_nilly: re! :banana:




tai hobe... online badhyo chatro khunjte eseche :D:party:

Little Gal
12-16-2011, 03:02 AM
amar Ma deke bollo.. eto man ache..shoktimaan nei??? ba hanumaan??? toder lekhaye comment korar jonnyo... :D :P :D

argha1991
12-17-2011, 02:52 AM
amar Ma deke bollo.. eto man ache..shoktimaan nei??? ba hanumaan??? toder lekhaye comment korar jonnyo... :D :P :D




kakimake amr sastango pennam dish... bohudin por erom turiyo ghoranar koutuk sunlum... :cornut: :cornut: :biggrin5::biggrin5::smilielol5: