Dreaming The Life

[MystyrMystyry]

And I'll live in a castle
On a floating island
Far above in the clouds

And through the gaps
I'll glimpse catches
Of what's been left

I may have a news feed
So if I change my mind
I'll remind myself why


Relaxing in a bubbly spa
Watching old movies
Or a first release

Champagne breakfast
In temperature controlled
And comfortable water bed

Coffee and fruit juice
From my garden
Prepared by robot

And if I need to visit
Your floating castle
I'll strap on a jetpack

And fly


http://i1134.photobucket.com/albums/m605/mystyrmystyry/mn1.jpg

My Castle



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[Revolte]

I Think the first "And" should be replaced or taken out. It makes me want to know what happened before it.

Other then that I really enjoyed this.

[Twota]

I really like the poem ;D

and I think starting with "And" is appropriate for the very same reason Revolte mentioned ;D

[evansan7]

I really liked this a lot. I personally felt beginning with "And" was perfect. It's so reminiscent of the way kids describe their daydreams and fantasies. "And we'll go to Disneyworld, and we'll ride all the rides, and we'll get ice cream, and we'll have the greatest time ever, and...." There's just no beginning or end to dreaming right? It's a part of who we are.

[Revolte]

I really like the poem ;D

and I think starting with "And" is appropriate for the very same reason Revolte mentioned ;D

I wan't a prequel :lurk5:

[free]

Pleasant and relaxing. The picture you paint with your words is just as attractive as the picture below the poem. A SF poem, I applaud to it.

[Bar22do]

I always admire your unrestrained imagination and colours of your verse. Very pleasant indeed; the image below - ludic. Did you create it, too?

[MystyrMystyry]

Thanks Revolte - I began with And as a way of suggesting that there was a reason for escaping, which are hinted at in the newsfeed bit - general worldweariness really

Thanks Twota

Thankyou Evansan7

Thankyou Free - this should be right up your username alley, yes?

Thankyou Bar22do - yes I did the picture, and posted it partly because I thought it a fairly slim poem, and partly because, well just because (maybe if anyone was disappointed in one they might enjoy the other - if both that's a bonus, if neither then there's no help for them I'm afraid ;) )

[Fellsman]

I enjoyed this read. The cartoon-like surrealism works really well for me.

Fellsman

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou Fellsman