Poetry Is

[cacian]

how shall I write
dearest oh dear?
shall I seek books
grammar and text
or shall I brave
other contexts?
Must I oblige
the reader's first?
is it easy you wish to
find and read to learn?

I must contest!
I write for me
and those who could
but just oblige
to seek other
mountains to climb.

meanings are games
I like to play.
just like a cart
you drive to try
pretense to real
you want to race
and win a face
just like a pro
you've seen afore.
you strive the best
for
nothing else
average your taste.

but then
talent has it
in lines,
Silverstone is,
one ride too fast
tricky to grasp
not what it seems,
love at first glance!

A sense in words
is up to you
you make of it
as you see fit.
Picasso did.
His work is
deed
obscure and far.

Peotry is,
paintings in words,
it comes and goes
just like the breeze
it feels just right
and then it's cold
fresher then fresh!


It's like a brush
it sways in waves,
the turns are brash
finer then tame,
it goes in peaks
then slides to brace
other more twists.


complex is fun
prosaic maze.
I write as such
from mind to words
the rest is world.

[hillwalker]

I can't resist adding that Poetry Is... nothing like the above.

H

[cacian]

Well of course it is not according to you.
To me this is how I see it.
Again it is not about what YOU think it is all about how I feel.
This is the reason why I write poetry.

[hillwalker]

I respect your opinion, but writing such a pompous piece about what 'poetry is' was inviting exactly the kind of tongue-in-cheek response I gave.

This piece says a lot about why your poetry is so impenetrable.

H :-)

[Jassy Melson]

Can't see the forest for the trees.

[smerdyakov]

Well of course it is not according to you.
To me this is how I see it.
Again it is not about what YOU think it is all about how I feel.
This is the reason why I write poetry.

This is a public forum, Cacian, Hill can respond to what you write however he wishes. Again, you have posted an indefensible piece of nonsense. In any case, the advice offered to you here is given for your benefit, not from a sense of malice or personal dislike. If it's "all about how I feel", and you have no desire to communicate this properly, why bother posting your poetry.
Don't mean to come across as harsh, but your petulant defensiveness is getting on om my nerves. If you can't take constructive criticism you will not grow as a writer.

[cacian]

Can't see the forest for the trees.

not the trees from the woods?

[smerdyakov]

Wood for the trees, it is.
Forest for the trees means the same thing, but is said in America, while the former is said in Britain. :)

[cacian]

Wood for the trees, it is.
Forest for the trees means the same thing, but is said in America, while the former is said in Britain. :)

Ah.
Thank you for this.
I never heard this expression before.
That is something new I learned today:smile5:

[tailor STATELY]

Playful and passionate.

Especially liked:

how shall I write
dearest oh dear?
shall I seek books
grammar and text
or shall I brave
other contexts?

You have a poet's heart, a philosopher's query, and the boldness to go whither you wish. I look forward to reading more of your poetry and watching your poetry develop.

Best wishes.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[Bar22do]

This is perhaps not your best piece of writing, but like Stately, I can recognize your potential here. You have passion, too. Through focussing your thought, channeling your feelings and being more selective, you can share the essence of what you wish to convey. Give yourself to developing your capacities! It's hard work, but so much satisfaction when we achieve something that communicates!

Best from Bar

[AuntShecky]

I'm resisting the urge to be flippant. Instead of negative criticism, I have a few suggestions for you, if I may.

1. Read all the modern and contemporary poems you can find. Start with going to the local public library and checking out a good anthology, such as the latest available edition of the Norton Anthology of Modern Poetry. Also, log on to (or get free online subscriptions to the daily poems posted by Poets.org (http://www.poets.org/) andThe Poetry Foundation (http://www.poetryfoundation.org/). (The latter not only features exemplary poems, it also offers bios of modern and contemporary poets, and extremely useful articles on the craft of poetry writing. While you read, in addition to trying to figure out just what the poet is trying to say, try to determine how he or she expresses that meaning.

A poem is an irrevocable marriage between form and content.

Continue to frequent the Personal Poetry forum of the Lit Net, read the posted poems as well as the criticism. When you become more knowledgeable (and/or) confident, you might try to offer comments on the works of your
fellow LitNutters.

2. Continue to practice writing verse yourself. Don't forget that the re-writing is as important as the initial drafting of the piece, if not more so.

and finally,

3. Learn all the rules concerning English grammar and composition. (You have to know the rules before you know how to break them.) For instance, I notice that particular posting lacks consistency in its use of upper case letters. Either use appropriate capitalization or drop it completely-- just one OR the other, not both.

For More "advice" click this link:

Auntie's Poetry Manifesto (http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=35382)

[cacian]

:smile5:
Playful and passionate.

Especially liked:


You have a poet's heart, a philosopher's query, and the boldness to go whither you wish. I look forward to reading more of your poetry and watching your poetry develop.

Best wishes.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

tailor thank you for your lovely feedback.:smile5: