How I Write My Poems

[Jack of Hearts]

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[smerdyakov]

Nice metaphor. Well done.

[Jack of Hearts]

Thanks! Just having a bit of fun...






J

[billl]

I am not a poet--but i have dabbled in the past. I never had a BANG I don't think though, not after grabbing onto or wrestling with the thing...

(Or is the BANG the popping of the big, dramatic, illusory prey? Like one of those Macy's Day balloons?)

smerdyakov gets the metaphor, so I'm sure it's just me though. I liked what was happening, but just can't get the BANG nailed down. Probably an interesting explanation for it...

[Jack of Hearts]

Well, it seemed to go with the fuse part, hence the creature exploding into life and either eating or bucking the narrator off (this writer is still waiting for one he can ride all the way through...).

But it's not high art. It was just some stupid little thing, so really the author can't make a defense for it. If it stinks, it stinks.







J

[Little Gal]

I don't think it stinks really... it has been done over and again by many poets in d past...d same content and basis ...and they have fared less than you...
Just got reminded of Robert Frost by reading d name of d poem...

[billl]

OK, maybe a BANG of realization then! (BANG! sheez... someone in the next room just said, "...banged up..." as I typed that, ugh...) I had actually considered "The Big Bang" as a possible metaphor for creation in this poem. I got the suddenness, I suppose, but got hung up on the brevity of a BANG, and the time it can take a poem to reach a final form.

I also should mention that I had missed the "fuse-to-BANG" connection, and that seems like something it'd be more than fair to blame on me.

[Jack of Hearts]

Nah, you're a pretty astute fellow, williaml. So if you're saying something isn't square, that's reason enough to listen. Not every poem can be all that good... in fact, this poster is having trouble with another one as we speak.

Maybe it's time for another recharge/break.





J

[billl]

Well, don't overdo it though.

[hillwalker]

Equating creating poetry to a rodeo ride... you must have so much fun when you feel a rhyme coming on.

H :-)

Yee-ha!

[qimissung]

Yeah, I liked how you whisper into it's hairy ear...hey, does that make you the poem whisperer? :D

Nah, it is a pretty good poem, though, Jack. Great metaphor and you can just feel that bull twitching and moving restlessly between your legs, gettin' ready to come alive...

[Jack of Hearts]

Thanks you two. This reader feels like taking a break from poetry. Probably going to try some prose out for awhile- been ignoring it. See you on the Short Story Forum, hopefully.







J

[Buh4Bee]

The bang bothered me too. But I don't think it is a big deal.