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Jerrybaldy
12-07-2011, 08:59 PM
Every other line.
I suckled for life
I sucked for pleasure
I sprang from you
I entered you
I love you always
I loved you once
You created me
I created you
You will never leave.
I left you.
symphony
12-08-2011, 12:52 AM
Every other line and every other life. Well written!
Haunted
12-08-2011, 02:39 AM
ok i'm not a riddle solver but when I saw this, I said to myself....WOW!
Every other odd line says mother.
Every other even line says woman / girlfriend / lover.
Some crazy Freudian / Jungian thing going on here, I think.... So simple, so complex. Pun intended.
Brilliant title, brilliant construct. I expect nothing less from you Jer.
Jack of Hearts
12-08-2011, 02:48 AM
Heheh. Complex.
Baldy, it's good to have your distinct voice back around these parts. This reader made the same interpretation of the poem as Haunted.
J
Pensive
12-08-2011, 04:44 AM
I must admit Haunted's interpretation was not the first one to come into my mind but I was quite amused after having read it. And curious too if that is what actually has been intended. :)
Very concise and carefully worded, love it!
Twota
12-08-2011, 11:26 AM
I read it too many times and I aint sure if I made the right interpretation, but I really like it.:D
cafolini
12-08-2011, 01:11 PM
You'll never leave. Foolishly impossible, whatever the context and implication. Seems rather incomplete.
AuntShecky
12-08-2011, 04:58 PM
This one's like the old commercial for Certs-- "It's two, TWO!, two mints in one!" We get two little verses here, just by reading other line.
It's clever, not "gimmick-y," cute, and definitely does not "suck."
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