Friends...

[Little Gal]

On a round sky and a round earth
In the long weeds and profound worth
Of brown moles and sound mirth
Of indifference and defined hearts
You sing in one breath,
I believe your song.

[country doctor]

Roar!

[Sancho]

Splendid!

[Lamarq]

I like it, yet i personally feel like it focused to heavily on rhyming, where i 'd wish it would be a little more simple.

True depth in poems is realized through simpleness, rather than complexity.
The simpler, the deeper.

To be specific:
I liked:
"You sing in one breath,
I believe your song. "
I hated:
"Of brown moles and sound mirth"

The rest was okay.

The end carries the power of lack of structure, lack of obedience, while the start feels like forced form.

[Little Gal]

Splendid!

Thank you... :)

[Little Gal]

I like it, yet i personally feel like it focused to heavily on rhyming, where i 'd wish it would be a little more simple.

True depth in poems is realized through simpleness, rather than complexity.
The simpler, the deeper.

To be specific:
I liked:
"You sing in one breath,
I believe your song. "
I hated:
"Of brown moles and sound mirth"

The rest was okay.

The end carries the power of lack of structure, lack of obedience, while the start feels like forced form.

I agree to most of what you have to say... especially "the simpler, the deeper" part...
the "lack" of obedience and structure is something I engage in, for a feel of freedom ...
however, I would like the phrase "forced form" to be explained as "form" interests me more than anything else...
Thank you... :)