Remember

[Delta40]

Remember when you thought it was great fun
to jiggle loose coins in your pocket,
skip across puddles just because they were there,
roll down hills with laughing children,
make animal shapes with your hands by candlelight,
rip petals off flowers while chanting,
he loves me, he loves me not,
listen to a bowl of rice bubbles go 'snap, crackle pop!'
lie flat in the park hunting rhino's in the clouds?

Thankfully it still is
and love can hope where reason would despair
so hunduray hunduray
looks like even clonazepam won't work when I'm manic
so let's roll down a hill

[Buh4Bee]

Delta! Welcome back, missed you on the boards.

Liked the first stanza, particularly skipping across puddles with loose coins jingling.

The second stanza loses momentum.

[Darcy88]

Nice poem Delta. I like it. Especially these lines:

"lie flat in the park hunting rhino's in the clouds?
and love can hope where reason would despair"

Bravo.

[Hawkman]

Great fun Delta, I always enjoy your self-deprecating humour.

Live and be well - H

[kittypaws]

Delta....you did it.

I don't care about verse or form I look for the spirit the poem cares and this one made me feel like flying a kite on a blustery day or chasing the grasshoppers who leap out of mine and Zeus's way.

Welcome to the Peter Pan Syndrome...stay as long as you like; it is FUN here!

hunduray!!

kittypaws
:thumbsup:

[Bar22do]

There is so much more to this poem than mere amusement... the N knows the value of acceptance of what can't be fought and the resulting renewal is the N's profit... always good to read you, Delta, where have you been!

[cafolini]

Good one, Delta. You probably should dedicate this one to Jacques Prevert's rappelle toi, Barbara.

Remember Barbara
It was raining nonstop in Brest that day
and you walked smiling
artless delighted dripping wet
in the rain
Remember Barbara
It was raining nonstop in Brest
and I saw you on rue de Siam
You were smiling
and I smiled too
Remember Barbara
You whom I did not know
You who did not know me
Remember
Remember that day all the same
Don't forget
A man was sheltering under a porch
and he called your name
Barbara
and you ran toward him in the rain
Dripping water delighted artless
and you threw yourself in his arms
Remember that Barbara
and don't be angry if I talk to you
I talk to all those I love
even if I've seen them only once
I talk to all those who love
even if I don't know them
Remember Barbara
Don't forget
that wise happy rain
on your happy face
in that happy town
That rain on the sea
on the arsenal
on the boat from Ouessant
Oh Barbara
What an idiot war
What has happened to you now
In this rain of iron
of fire of steel of blood
and the one who held you tight in his arms
lovingly
is he dead vanished or maybe still alive
Oh Barbara
It is raining nonstop in Brest
as it rained before
But it's not the same and everything is ruined
It's a rain of mourning terrible and desolate
It's not even a storm any more
of iron of steel of blood
Just simply clouds
that die like dogs
Dogs that disappear
along the water in Brest
and are going to rot far away
far far away from Brest
where there is nothing left.

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love can hope where reason would despair
Wonderful.

[Delta40]

Thanks for the great feedback. I just got out of hospital today after damaging my temporal lobe during an epileptic seizure which was the inspiration for this poem. Glad to be home, even if I'm not feeling like the old me....

[MystyrMystyry]

Whoa Delta. Nothing serious I hope, just a bruise?

You'll be okay Delta :)

[Bar22do]

Oh Delta, I had the feeling something was going on with you, and not the best (was it temporal lobe or temporal bone! I hope the last and that your temporal lobe if fine!!!)...
I hope you're recovering fast and my heart is with with you. Hugs from Bar

[Delta40]

I honestly don't know. I keep thinking I have known complete strangers for years but there is a slight delay in recognising my own family and friends. My neurologist doesn't know whether its permanent or temporary and I'm kinda overwhelmed right now so like any scholar I'm researching it as much as possible before my next appointment on Wednesday. In the meantime, I hope to keep writing poetry. Forgive me if I'm not so sharp on reviews at the moment and I figure a sense of humour might go a long way so crack all the jokes you like okay?

[cafolini]

I honestly don't know. I keep thinking I have known complete strangers for years but there is a slight delay in recognising my own family and friends. My neurologist doesn't know whether its permanent or temporary and I'm kinda overwhelmed right now so like any scholar I'm researching it as much as possible before my next appointment on Wednesday. In the meantime, I hope to keep writing poetry. Forgive me if I'm not so sharp on reviews at the moment and I figure a sense of humour might go a long way so crack all the jokes you like okay?

Well, you are speaking very coherently. Looks like it might be a temporary situation, even just suggestive. Hope so. Wish you the best.

[Delta40]

Well, you are speaking very coherently. Looks like it might be a temporary situation, even just suggestive. Hope so. Wish you the best.

lol. Smashing your left temporal lobe doesn't affect your intelligence but it can do other strange stuff like I mentioned above. I'm pretty sure from all the reading I've done that I have temporal lobe epilepsy so what happens when you bash it? lol I just don't know. Maybe I need to give it another bash to solve the problem?

[cafolini]

lol. Smashing your left temporal lobe doesn't affect your intelligence but it can do other strange stuff like I mentioned above. I'm pretty sure from all the reading I've done that I have temporal lobe epilepsy so what happens when you bash it? lol I just don't know. Maybe I need to give it another bash to solve the problem?

No, no. Don't do that. Hammer your big toe and you'll see immediately how irrelevant everything else becomes. :out:

[PrinceMyshkin]

"love can hope where reason would despair" is such a clean, strong line that you ought to end right there as anything that comes after it is likely to sound anti-climactic.

[firefangled]

Beautiful fun! More rolling down hills, less clonazepam.

[Jerrybaldy]

which bees produce milk? Boobees :) You did ask for humour. Love the whimsical feel of this piece Delta. Nostalgia aint what it used to be though:) Think I used that one way back, but the guest list here changes so fast I think I got away with it... dont mention the war.
anyways. Loved it Delta :)

[symphony]

Only you could make such great poetry even out of seizures, Delta. And no, I'm not wishing for more seizures, so don't start collapsing yet. You can make great poetry out of apples and oranges scattered on a sunshine table as well, so please just stick to innocent fruits will ya? ;)
I hope you're fine.

[Fellsman]

Hi Delta40


I have no clever critiques or words of wisdom, I am just dropping by to say how much I really enjoyed this fun read...


Fellsman

[AuntShecky]

Lots of best wishes for a speedy recovery, Delta. (Lots of love, too.)