looking

[cacian]

looking to find a way
to sum up a great word
is not as swift as lords,
they might read up a deed
she might side up a lease,
they might rise up the solds
she might log off to Rome,
all roads might lead to both
but one does always sway,
as odd must stand its gate
fubared has found a seat!


let's wonder down to Foe
ask it if it was bold
to river wash those sores?
fightfull to grab those wars
all stones might lead to seas
with sandy shores but warn!
of rockfull layed as lawns


looking to flash a sound
instrument versus the clap,
one, holds up notes accute
the other hides rebute,
to joing the say to mind
to bring out voice allure,
takes details over looks
tendencies hardly pair,
meanings and overloads
saying,
wanting,
doubting,
had Thomas clowned a fake?

looking to bridge a leap
running,
walking,
waving,
slowly hopping those hills
pondering over the curves
are they pretty to bend?
Are mountains higher down
when they look up a map?
peaking
over all peaks,
the size of each is reached,
mind it!!
its number doesn't spill
too big has weight to hold,
too small is quick to flop,
just right is rounded fine,
courage will need it most
to climb and make a point.

[hillwalker]

A couple of points - a larger font size would make this a little easier on the eyes - and, I guess I'm with the majority of readers who haven't a clue what this is about (one can only conclude that it's not meant to make any sense at all).

It's grammatically haywire, not even unconventionally poetic, and although one has to assume the writer has chosen to play with words rather than make a statement or share a thought, the word 'fubared' seems to sum up this piece rather well.

A case of being a little too clever - more fun for the writer than the reader...

H

[cafolini]

I liked it. Pretty rich; not just playing on words. Paints a picture of following the encounters with appropriate turns. Writing should always be fun for the writer. Only then can it be fun for the reader.
Grammar was invented long before the Monkey Grammarian appeared piggybacking on it.

[cacian]

I liked it. Pretty rich; not just playing on words. Paints a picture of following the encounters with appropriate turns. Writing should always be fun for the writer. Only then can it be fun for the reader.
Grammar was invented long before the Monkey Grammarian appeared piggybacking on it.

Thank you cafolini.
This is a great feedback.
Very appreciative that you took time to read my piece:smile5:

[cacian]

A couple of points - a larger font size would make this a little easier on the eyes - and, I guess I'm with the majority of readers who haven't a clue what this is about (one can only conclude that it's not meant to make any sense at all).

It's grammatically haywire, not even unconventionally poetic, and although one has to assume the writer has chosen to play with words rather than make a statement or share a thought, the word 'fubared' seems to sum up this piece rather well.

A case of being a little too clever - more fun for the writer than the reader...

H

Thank you hillwalker, always appreciative that you do take time to read my poetries.
I agree about the font I did change it.:smile5: