natural

[cacian]

tiresome is,
long gone and washed,
rivers delight, inflate the shores

rinsing their waves on sultry stones,
then waltz
around in shimmering youth,

impressed, the winds of salsa
dance
upon the slopes that greet the doves,
sat on a branch tweetering raps
a sweeter tender chant of Alps,

Divine, the sound of life and scents
sings sleepy blue bells to a trance.

[hillwalker]

Some of this sounds quite evocative - though there's rather too much alliteration by the end. As for making any sense - it doesn't, and the change of verb tense half way through is also rather off-putting.

H

[cacian]

Hi hillwalker
Thank you for reading my piece.
I am not clear about the verb change.
I thought I could use both present tense and present continous to make it rhyme otherwise it might come across as a dictation.
Again I might be wrong.

[hillwalker]

Apologies are due - I misread 'sat' as the past tense of 'sit' when what you probably meant to write was 'sitting'. I'm not sure what effect either has on the rhyme but no matter...

H

[cacian]

I chose to put 'sat' to project the idea of 'further past' as oppose to the immediat past.