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Biggus
11-25-2011, 06:40 AM
BEAUTEOUS ROSE

Beauteous Rose in summer dress
In scented splendour
The courtly bees attends thee
Thy fragrant demeanour
In sunlit display
Leaves all nature in awe

THE NIGHT IS STILL

The night is still
And summer flowers sleep
To awake with dawn

A NEW DAY DAWNING

On the distant horizon
The embers of the dawn
Brightly glow
As God blows gentle breath
Upon the glowing coals
And lights up another day

WANE BITTER SEASON

Wane bitter season,
dare Snowdrops to appear, before
winters lingering bite

SPRING WAKES

Spring wakes from lazy
slumber, finding the Crocus heads
already on display

deryk
11-27-2011, 02:20 AM
These little snapshots have a way of glistening on the tongue. My only criticism is that the form isn't as lyrical as the language. You might want to rename this "Seasonal Verse". I was meandering through the changes from Winter to Spring in my mind, mostly.

Biggus
12-01-2011, 07:50 AM
Thanks Deryk

cacian
12-01-2011, 10:02 AM
nice interesting poem.
I am not familiar with the word 'wane'.

I wan thinking just remove the subheading titles as you do not need them and it would the poem reads/float better.
Maybe us As/whilst/then/ will help making the poems mix together for a better read.

free
12-02-2011, 06:21 AM
I like the poetry inspired by nature's beauty, well done.