Summer

[Delta40]

While the weekend is engulfed
in smouldering scrub,
nature tells us that Summer
is twirling to a fiery entrance,
her skirt billowing across the hills.
Bananas come down in price.
Finally! says the town
but the cost is not low enough
to peel ourselves off leather chairs
and make the eye watering journey
through acrid smoke
to the Asian fruit n veg market.
Nectarines and mangoes
wait to be handled and bagged
but sport on every channel is its own glue
and our skin dehydrates in the swelter.
When the finals are over,
we will step out into the searing glare
and purchase tropical fruit
now softer to the touch
and quench the raw thirst
wedged in our bushfired throats.

[Buh4Bee]

Hey Delta! This follows in your style as I have come to know it. The images and grammar are clear as a bell, but I wish there is some punctuation. The reason I feel this way is because I paused naturally at the end of particular phrases (L5, for example). I noticed you capitalized 'Bananas', so why not add a period? I'm not sure what other people think, but it may just be a silly thing that bothered me.

[Hawkman]

Great last line, love, "bushfired throats."

[Delta40]

I was using punctuation but stopped recently. I'll take it up again starting with this poem!

[Buh4Bee]

Hey, I think it's a good thing to experiment. I like it better with the punctuation, myself. But it is a very minor reason to edit. Nice read.

[IceM]

Finally! says the town
but the cost is not low enough
to peel ourselves off leather chairs
and make the eye watering journey
through acrid smoke
to the Asian fruit n veg market.


Almost ridiculous, how effortless and seamless this is.

Good poem Delta, I was glad your poem was the first I read upon my return to these forums.