Worship the Sun! Worship Love!

[WolfLarsen]

The Sun
I reach up over the sky
I grab at your thoughts
I smash the world
I wrestle the phrases of poetry into rivers of enigmas that fall all over you
I discover all the hallucinations and dizzy and ecstasy that is you
Everything is you and me and the sunshine
Around each person is the landscape of their psychosis

Copyright 2004 by Wolf Larsen

[Jerrybaldy]

Had you pissed off after your first controversial posting I would have got you, but now you are confusing me.Good luck to you.

[Bewlay Brother]

"Everything is you and me and the sunshine" - take out this sentence and the poem isn't bad. It has some nice lines.

[Alexander III]

I think this is one of your finest, but the last two lines are to cliche, conventional, they don't fit well into a poem that is very you. The poem without the last two lines would be much better I think. I like this quite a bit.

[YesNo]

Although I'm sort of vegetarian, I liked the quote in your current signature about animals having the right to be delicious.

I admit I don't understand the poem. Actually, I suspect I rarely understand poetry in general, so don't take this as anything more than my own problem. I did like the word "psychosis" at the end for some, likely psychotic, reason.

[AuntShecky]

The inherent exuberance of this one perhaps compensates for its lack of freshness, as there is a bit of triteness in the expression. Change "dizzy" to its noun form, "dizziness"(?) Another suggestion is to correct the pronoun in the last line from "their" to "his."