My life, my idol and my world

[osho]

Every verse is inspired
And has a fountain somewhere
Flowing spherically
And ending up at the point where it originates.

Had you, a fountainhead, not been a source
Who would have flooded my soul with exotic feelings?

My idol is my inner strength manifested into your face
For you are unmasked face,
I feel merited
Your sky-deep blue eyes
Your Himalayan heart
Your celestial stretch
Never deceived
Your earthy appeal
Your godly demeanor
Your mortal obsession
Entombs me in a dream

I do not care it is short-long-lived
I am nested in your thoughts
You are playing in my imagination

We three together carve a way out of this bedlam
My life, my idol and my world

[Delta40]

i like the poem but I don't think celestial needs to be repeated twice. I'm unsure of the grammar in:

My idol is my inner strength manifest into your face
For your are unmasked face,

and again, the double use of face in two lines appears repetitive. You're really putting youself into your poems now Osho and its great to see the deeper personal side.

[osho]

i like the poem but I don't think celestial needs to be repeated twice. I'm unsure of the grammar in:

My idol is my inner strength manifest into your face
For your are unmasked face,

and again, the double use of face in two lines appears repetitive. You're really putting youself into your poems now Osho and its great to see the deeper personal side.

You are true, Delta these are the mistakes inadvertently done. My bad habit is I never edit my poem and in fact had I read it thoroughly once more such mistakes would have been averted. When a feeling strikes me I put them into words and the result is the poem and I then leave the poem and be away even from the forum. Henceforth I will be more careful about such blunders and of course such slip-ups are unacceptable.

You have very generously pointed out them and I know you have a positive attitude and I really feel indebted for your invaluable support.

[cafolini]

You are true, Delta these are the mistakes inadvertently done. My bad habit is I never edit my poem and in fact had I read it thoroughly once more such mistakes would have been averted. When a feeling strikes me I put them into words and the result is the poem and I then leave the poem and be away even from the forum. Henceforth I will be more careful about such blunders and of course such slip-ups are unacceptable.

You have very generously pointed out them and I know you have a positive attitude and I really feel indebted for your invaluable support.

It's a good thing to not read until you finish. Most of the problems are idiomatic. Nothing a good editor cannot fix without taking away your meaning.

[osho]

It's a good thing to not read until you finish. Most of the problems are idiomatic. Nothing a good editor cannot fix without taking away your meaning.

In fact ideas occur to me, in fact an inspiration at times and this inspiration is overpowering and I do write such poems at some of my busies-est hours when I am at my workstation. A short spite and inspirations flash through me. I get driven and that ends up in a poem.

I am really happy and to read your beautiful feelings through this comment cascading from a beautiful heart and you have always been a source of inspiration and encouragement.