Please help edit my short essay!

[ze_better]

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[hillwalker]

You’ve managed to convince me that changing to an artificial playing surface is a good idea (you might also care to mention a possible reduction in injuries in Body para #2 since players on uneven ground can often sprain an ankle or worse).

As for your conclusion – it’s a case of summarizing then ending on a memorable note.

Something along the lines of :

Artificial turf is a good investment – saving on maintenance costs, promoting improved playing technique and providing other opportunities to generate funds. If you value this school’s sporting heritage and hope to see it flourish in the future artificial turf is the way ahead.

H

[ze_better]

You’ve managed to convince me that changing to an artificial playing surface is a good idea (you might also care to mention a possible reduction in injuries in Body para #2 since players on uneven ground can often sprain an ankle or worse).

As for your conclusion – it’s a case of summarizing then ending on a memorable note.

Something along the lines of :

Artificial turf is a good investment – saving on maintenance costs, promoting improved playing technique and providing other opportunities to generate funds. If you value this school’s sporting heritage and hope to see it flourish in the future artificial turf is the way ahead.

H

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