A Craving

[organizedchaos]

Its like I talk my way into craving you.
We are not soul mates
but I know the pleasure you give me
so I keep coming back to your touch.
Lying forehead to forehead,
I'm crying
and I don't know what to say to help you understand me
As always, I hesitate to look into your eyes for too long.
Intense by nature,
the fire coming from my gaze
is no match for the light sparkle in your own.
Your hands are starting to velcro themselves to me
And although I don't love you
it still hurts when we part,
knowing that this is not forever.

[Delta40]

I appreciated the subtle pain throughout this piece.

[Buh4Bee]

The poem seems to be written with a conscious ambivalence. I am impressed by how well it is done. The emotions are clearly articulated. There is a sweet harmony that left me wanting to know the rest of the love story.

[hillwalker]

It's certainly heartfelt without being mawkish - and I liked the 'velcro' reference even though one wouldn't expect it to work so well as a metaphor. A great attempt at a contemporary love poem that actually works.

H