The Idea.

[zoolane]

The Idea.


Slim glance of idealism,
which slimmer just below the surface.
With the must achieve sense of urgent.
But putting one thing for other.
The backbone still edged it way through my flesh.

Pulling us down to bottom of the sea.
It they in your mind but you refuse to notice,
in hope will go away.
Sorry it will be here in years to come.
Just admit can not doing everything to promise
for them but then again you let us down first.

[MystyrMystyry]

I love the clinkety clank of the sounds Zoo, but I'm not sure if it's directed anger at a person or feeling (though it reads as a bit frustrated so I'm imagining someone has caused grief but you don't want to explicitly point your finger - I could be completely wrong). To me it actually seems about three or four things have gotten to the narrator causing the frustration (which is how it usually goes - just one thing is rarely enough).

I'll stop here in case I'm way off track (I haven't slept properly in days so it's getting hard to concentrate. When do school holidays end? The rowdy brats next door are driving me bats!)

[hillwalker]

For some reason I pictured a shark - a painful memory buried deep in the psyche that will never go away and is determined to carry its victim down to deepest water where it can feast on the body.

When someone has been hurt in some fundamental way it's impossible to shake free of the weight such an experience burdens us with and I think you do a remarkable job of portraying this frustration by making the memory assume a life of its own.

H

[zoolane]

I love the clinkety clank of the sounds Zoo, but I'm not sure if it's directed anger at a person or feeling (though it reads as a bit frustrated so I'm imagining someone has caused grief but you don't want to explicitly point your finger - I could be completely wrong). To me it actually seems about three or four things have gotten to the narrator causing the frustration (which is how it usually goes - just one thing is rarely enough).

I'll stop here in case I'm way off track (I haven't slept properly in days so it's getting hard to concentrate. When do school holidays end? The rowdy brats next door are driving me bats!)

You're right one person same person as usual my partner. His great idea of start own business which know want to do for some time now. The thing is that his think or disillssion hiself in think that it going year or two, when reality it going be alot long due debts which we in and we both choose and knew what it would mean in long term. Last two lines are direct to point of we need stuff whether mean basic or stuff would like to have but long as his step mother and nephews don't go with out.
School hoilday end this weekend.



For some reason I pictured a shark - a painful memory buried deep in the psyche that will never go away and is determined to carry its victim down to deepest water where it can feast on the body.

When someone has been hurt in some fundamental way it's impossible to shake free of the weight such an experience burdens us with and I think you do a remarkable job of portraying this frustration by making the memory assume a life of its own.

H

Thank you H for comment it was suppose be life of it own due fact normal form the idea in people mind.

[Bar22do]

Yes, anger here, perhaps even more helplessness than anger. I love this poem a lot, Zool.
Reading through your threads, I get more and more into your many layered universe - and it's a complex situation to be a visitor here, trying to see only what you want to show. But it's quite an experience. Thank you.

[zoolane]

Yes, anger here, perhaps even more helplessness than anger. I love this poem a lot, Zool.
Reading through your threads, I get more and more into your many layered universe - and it's a complex situation to be a visitor here, trying to see only what you want to show. But it's quite an experience. Thank you.

Thank you Bar, I am grateful for you taking time to readied back my threads. I am glad find it as 'enlightening' experience.