This is realism, stupid

[osho]

I am born here to die, whilst
I have seen heaps of bones
And their musical rattling
Living roomy lives we want swell
Into our ballooned egos
This world is a hell of infernal desires
Wherein men eat men by emptying the earth
Of their next swallows
Of their pleasant bungalows
This world is what I call
Full of man-eating scavenger s in human forms
It is not you and me but our inner blankness
We have never fought in fact
Yet something in us fight in principle
Through ideologues and self-made and self-serving codes
This is stupid, my friend to run after a blind concept
Giving it a nuance of religion and creed
I know I am born to win
And to defy you
But I do not realize
Even if I am likely to release the breath of life
For I never realize I am born to die
My rocky heart does not melt
And my stony mind cannot understand
The realism of what I am though born to die

[FozzieFunk]

I dig the **** out of this poem. It's beautifully constructed and the last line was thought provoking. Wherein men eat men by emptying the earth. That just reminds me of how our society is set up to consume consume consume. We are constantly eating (waring) our fellow man in a invisible contest, which is just a marathon.

[Delta40]

I must admit I get a little distracted from these statements and although this may not be you intention Osho, I get the impression that much of your poetry has a preacher tone which somehow sets you apart from the statements you make. Have you considered writing more which puts you equally amongst these thoughtful, sometimes rash lines?

[hillwalker]

I agree with Delta - I always tend to picture you standing on a soap box when you're writing your poems, looking down upon everyone else. Most of your pieces are rather impersonal and clinically expressed.

Who are you? and why don't you reveal a little emotion into your writing?

H :-)

[osho]

I agree with you all of you and the fact is I have been experimenting and to receive your comments is something fascinating to me.

I am just a beginner and I have miles and miles to go and your comments and criticisms act as elixirs. I had not written poems prior to writing on this forum. I am no doubt an avid reader but I have never had tried that.

I am just happy that you have read them and gave your opinions. This is far better to be commented rather than being ignored and it has helped me to improve my writing style and identify my flaws.

I am grateful for your constructive comments.

[osho]

I agree with Delta - I always tend to picture you standing on a soap box when you're writing your poems, looking down upon everyone else. Most of your pieces are rather impersonal and clinically expressed.

Who are you? and why don't you reveal a little emotion into your writing?

H :-)

Thank you for your advice and indeed I will try to incorporate emotion into my next poems.