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Delta40
10-23-2011, 07:03 AM
While the pork crackles,
another pen runs out of ink
as it endeavours to underline
differences between mashed potatoes
and the fear of all mankind.
The oven temperature light flickers,
spattering fat like a court room summation.
After rape and vegetable peels,
evidence is forever blocking her sink.
Resentful of microwaved peas
and suspicious of lumpy gravy,
there lingers that invisible, bothersome fly
which can never be exterminated.
How it feasts on every sticky, sweet ointment.
As the witness tries to bubble like a yorkshire pudding,
her half baked thoughts become airborne
through the misty spectacle of insect killer,
blurring her hopes the verdict would be delicious.


This is written and composed by my brother http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fYaomn1OkqY

Misschelseabun
10-23-2011, 07:24 AM
I enjoyed this, the below line in particular rolls beautifully off the tongue and conjures up some brilliant pause for thought:

as it endeavours to underline
differences between mashed potatoes
and the fear of all mankind.

Skia
10-23-2011, 09:01 AM
I honestly forgot how much I enjoyed your poems Delta xD

osho
10-23-2011, 09:53 AM
Your skills of piecing together unalike metaphors startled me and as a poet myself it is natural to envy you and dream of the moment I am you. I like the following lines, a kind of fusion. Half baked thoughts is a mesmeric turn of phrase and only an accomplished poet like Delta can make best use of.




there lingers that invisible, bothersome fly
which can never be exterminated.
How it feasts on every sticky, sweet ointment.
.........her half baked thoughts..................
blurring her hopes the verdict will be delicious.

PrinceMyshkin
10-23-2011, 03:26 PM
I would change "the verdict will be" to the verdict would be, but how powerfully the whole of this starts off - and never lets up. In this poem and so many of your others it's as if everything around you is animated!

MystyrMystyry
10-23-2011, 05:08 PM
Brilliant!

Delta40
10-23-2011, 06:18 PM
Edited at your request Prince.