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Delta40
10-21-2011, 10:20 AM
Look out the window
and see the constellation of symptoms.
Mama always said it was from multi-axis living.
Ax this one, then the next,
like we all had to huddle under the one umbrella,
because he commanded it.

Round the fire, Pappy was grandiose
Industrialization brought us to this place of poverty.
His disturbed words, thoughts and actions
deluded the family apple cart
and at night, I would listen to its rickety wheel
roll down the hill, trying to escape
from the association of logic to the forest of
vivid links and imaginary connections.

As if a lion prowling through the trees would change anything.

She was there in the morning for us, singing rays of sunshine
while wringing his stagnant rationale down the drain.
We modelled him like students whose threshold of meaning
could never reach a mathematical conclusion.
Sometimes I longed to flee across burning grains of sand
as if I was a Speedy Gonzalez beetle.

Other times I held his needful hands to protect the status quo.

The voice of Pappy echoed through me,
You're not as different as you think.
Everyone has a gun with a faulty trigger
tucked at the back of a bedside drawer.
When I ran out of ways to pay, the fuse blew
and shattered bulbs put us all in the dark.

Mama rocked back and forth moaning,
I tried, Oh God how I tried!
I watched the stuffing from my teddy
float down down like snow in the aftermath.
Soft white childhood joy shrouded his body.
A Daddy whose light was finally extinguished.

Delta40
10-21-2011, 05:50 PM
I know this piece appears off centre.

MystyrMystyry
10-21-2011, 10:36 PM
Good imagery Delta. There's something about the reflective quality makes me think it's to be stumbled across it in an anthology, along with a dozen equally sparkling little gems and jewels, waiting like a hidden treasure for the right moment to be discovered. And here is the moment now!

:)

osho
10-21-2011, 10:40 PM
I appreciate the craft at first glance. The depth and alignment is out of measure for me.

Delta40
10-22-2011, 12:18 AM
Thanks MM and Osho. I appreciate your honest critique.

symphony
10-22-2011, 06:17 AM
I love how freely you can express yourself in your poems, Delta, and how present you are in each of your lines. It reads like you have just got hold of a pen and as I read one line you're writing the next down.

Delta40
10-22-2011, 02:32 PM
Thanks Symphony.

Delta40
10-25-2011, 08:56 AM
Edited.