Electrify me

[osho]

I call it falling in love
I want to be hot and keyed up
For I am incomplete on my own
I do not want to be misted in time

Is it love? Yes, that is it.
Is it sex? Yes, that is it.
Is it going and living together?
It is all this and that
I despise to live wasted and decomposed
Or else the fluid that gives you the sap of life would dry up
I want to fly with you on the wings of time to defy eternity
For in togetherness we can regenerate and live thru posterity

I know you understand this truth
Yet you want procedures, rituals and find myself a misfit
I want a small shudder that makes all the difference
Life springs from it and the entire lineage of history
Your withdrawal ends up in dooming me
Vibrate me a little I will show you a spectacle of creation.
In a little excitement and vibration between you and me

Lies the next history of the world

[Buh4Bee]

This is so lovely in a sense. Sounds like a modern day marriage proposal. I enjoy the "straight-forward" talking quality of the writing. It is extremely personal and intimate, yet as an outsider, I can still enjoy the proposition.
On the other hand, there is a crudeness that detracts from the romantic sentiment. It is not a balance poem, because of this fact.

[osho]

You never failed to inspire me and there is fire in your words of inspiration and the flow of poetry here on this forum from me happened and happens through your words of encouragement.

[Delta40]

I like the build up of romanticism, the stripping it bare and yet still revealing an underlying beauty in the challenges two people face.

your best yet osho.

[osho]

I like the build up of romanticism, the stripping it bare and yet still revealing an underlying beauty in the challenges two people face.

your best yet osho.

Your words mean a lot to me and in fact it is the fire of inspiration that can kindle my heart and I jump into a trance. Of course with this will shoot of an overflow of passion for me. Thank you Delta, my dear friend for your encouraging words.

[symphony]

I really like it. It's easy, it's going, it's telling. But I have a feeling that it will read even better without these 3 lines that sound a little redundant after the line that comes right before these:
Or else the fluid that gives you the sap of life would dry up
I want to fly with you on the wings of time to defy eternity
For in togetherness we can regenerate and live thru posterity