The Phoenix Rises in Venus

[Dark Muse]

The Phoenix Rises in Venus

I feel the flames of your fingers
lick my skin and my soul
becomes scorched
as I burn from the inside out.

The intensity of your eyes
hunger filled and predatory
eats me alive in a single
glance and the touch of your
body incinerates me.

Your ecstasy leaves me
in ashes, swept away
in the murmurs of your breath
and with the quiver of your lips,
you sing me home again.

Born a woman new
I rise from the fires of your
flesh, revitalized
I tremble in exhilaration.

For whenever you are near
you burn me alive
in temptation, that I may
be born again in your unexpected
moments of tenderness
and so with you I will live
in eternal youth.

[MystyrMystyry]

Some of your poems are so pure, self-contained and perfect, that I feel I'm muddying the thread by commenting. Sometimes I'm so mesmerised after experiencing them that I completely forget to comment.

I'm forcing myself to snap out of it and comment - breathtaking and awe-inspiring!

[Dark Muse]

And I always appreciate it when you are generous enough to leave a comment.

[Jassy Melson]

This poem is nearly flawless.

To prevent confusion:

In the first stanza, a comma could be inserted after the word 'skin' in the second line.

Fourth line, second stanza, after the word 'glance' a comma could be inserted.

The third stanza is somewhat confusing. You could repair the confusion by adding a comma after the word 'breath' in the third line and deleting the comma after the word 'lips' in the fourth line. In the third line, 'you' needs to be changed to 'your'.

If you would add some commas to the poem, it would prevent all confusion.