anne2346
10-11-2011, 01:41 PM
Hi all! I have written the first draft of a college essay. I had to pick a quote and work my life into it. Any ideas, changes, advise, would be appreciated!
One of the most important personal qaulities I have worked on my whole life, no matter what, is my character. I have worked to be an honest person with goals. I could pick a quote from my favorite book or a quote from a famous scholar, but I'm not going to do that. I've picked a quote that inspires me to work harder on myself as a person and on my goals that I hope to someday achieve.
"There comes a time when every life goes off course. In this desperate moment you must choose your direction. Will you fight to stay on the path while others tell you who you are? Or will you label yourself? Will you be honored by your choice? Or will you embrace your new path? Each morning you choose to move forward or to simply give up."
This quote reminds me that although things do get hard sometimes, you chose your own path in life.
As I began my Freshman year of High School I was very shy, had low self-esteem, and found myself turning away from seemingly impossible challenges. I can admit at that age I was very naive. I began to realize all my faults as the year went on and decided to change the direction of my life. Before I began my Sophomore year, I decided my first step to forwarding my life in the right direction would be to improve my grades. This resulted with my high school average improving by 11 points. I went from having a sixty-five in math my Freshman year to a ninety-five my Sophomore year. My grades continued to increase thru my Junior year as well. My second step was to become more active in school activities. I joined several clubs Then tried out for the Girl's Varsity Soccer Team, which was extremely hard for me to do because I never played soccer a day in my life before that. I gave it my all and somehow made the team! This taught me I really can do anything I set my mind too. The lessons learned from joining that team and the clubs are life changing. I made a number of great friends which improved my life in so many ways. Junior year I was diagnosed with scoliosis so I was almost forced to quit the soccer team, but instead of quitting I approached the team coach and told him I really wanted to remain a part of the team and asked if I could become a Team Manager. He agreed and I am still a part of the team. If this was in the past when I was more naive I would have just given up all together. Quitting is no longer an option for me no matter what life throws at me. I personally don't believe there is a better way to learn and grow rather then life's experience itself.
Learning from my mistakes fully made me who I am today. With that being said I would like to pursue a major in Education. Students sometimes do not realize that opportunities handed to them in high school, they can basically do anything they want with their life if they just give it their all. If I had realized this my Freshman year, I would currently have a much higher GPA. The main reason I want to become a teacher is to make a difference in students lives. I believe that the feeling of positively altering a students life will be the best reward. When I help people, the satisfaction I get from that is always so much more rewarding then money or anything else. Whether it be simply helping a friend out by lending them a book or volunteering at the soup kitchen in my area, I'm the happiest after I do something positive to help some else. The first question I asked myself when I was trying to choose a future career was "What will make me happiest?" and my conclusion was to become a teacher because I can help students learn from my mistakes in high school, nothing will make me happier then improving a students life so they can attend the college of there choice or pursue a career that makes them happy as I did.
This quote inspires me to never give up. No matter what life hands me, I will always give it my all. I'm not exactly sure who I am just yet, I'm hoping Marist can help me with that, but I can promise I'm a very honest and sincere person. I will always work my hardest whether is be school work, a club I joined, or friendships. I will choose what I want to do with my life and I will choose what type of person I am. I want Marist College to be the college I attend, it is my number one choice. I would be honored to attend this college.
One of the most important personal qaulities I have worked on my whole life, no matter what, is my character. I have worked to be an honest person with goals. I could pick a quote from my favorite book or a quote from a famous scholar, but I'm not going to do that. I've picked a quote that inspires me to work harder on myself as a person and on my goals that I hope to someday achieve.
"There comes a time when every life goes off course. In this desperate moment you must choose your direction. Will you fight to stay on the path while others tell you who you are? Or will you label yourself? Will you be honored by your choice? Or will you embrace your new path? Each morning you choose to move forward or to simply give up."
This quote reminds me that although things do get hard sometimes, you chose your own path in life.
As I began my Freshman year of High School I was very shy, had low self-esteem, and found myself turning away from seemingly impossible challenges. I can admit at that age I was very naive. I began to realize all my faults as the year went on and decided to change the direction of my life. Before I began my Sophomore year, I decided my first step to forwarding my life in the right direction would be to improve my grades. This resulted with my high school average improving by 11 points. I went from having a sixty-five in math my Freshman year to a ninety-five my Sophomore year. My grades continued to increase thru my Junior year as well. My second step was to become more active in school activities. I joined several clubs Then tried out for the Girl's Varsity Soccer Team, which was extremely hard for me to do because I never played soccer a day in my life before that. I gave it my all and somehow made the team! This taught me I really can do anything I set my mind too. The lessons learned from joining that team and the clubs are life changing. I made a number of great friends which improved my life in so many ways. Junior year I was diagnosed with scoliosis so I was almost forced to quit the soccer team, but instead of quitting I approached the team coach and told him I really wanted to remain a part of the team and asked if I could become a Team Manager. He agreed and I am still a part of the team. If this was in the past when I was more naive I would have just given up all together. Quitting is no longer an option for me no matter what life throws at me. I personally don't believe there is a better way to learn and grow rather then life's experience itself.
Learning from my mistakes fully made me who I am today. With that being said I would like to pursue a major in Education. Students sometimes do not realize that opportunities handed to them in high school, they can basically do anything they want with their life if they just give it their all. If I had realized this my Freshman year, I would currently have a much higher GPA. The main reason I want to become a teacher is to make a difference in students lives. I believe that the feeling of positively altering a students life will be the best reward. When I help people, the satisfaction I get from that is always so much more rewarding then money or anything else. Whether it be simply helping a friend out by lending them a book or volunteering at the soup kitchen in my area, I'm the happiest after I do something positive to help some else. The first question I asked myself when I was trying to choose a future career was "What will make me happiest?" and my conclusion was to become a teacher because I can help students learn from my mistakes in high school, nothing will make me happier then improving a students life so they can attend the college of there choice or pursue a career that makes them happy as I did.
This quote inspires me to never give up. No matter what life hands me, I will always give it my all. I'm not exactly sure who I am just yet, I'm hoping Marist can help me with that, but I can promise I'm a very honest and sincere person. I will always work my hardest whether is be school work, a club I joined, or friendships. I will choose what I want to do with my life and I will choose what type of person I am. I want Marist College to be the college I attend, it is my number one choice. I would be honored to attend this college.