A little something

[Delusion]

He had wanted to go to California for years, the urge had suddenly taken over and after falling in love with the picturesque beaches and foaming seas he had moved there. Regretting nothing and leaving all family behind he had never expected this; a medley of fear and drowsiness that he could not control. Money was the goal, violence was the medium. No remorse was shown in the quick and brutal attack and it had hit him hard. Totally unaware of what was going on, he had hit the floor and blacked out, his empty wallet thrown next to him and blood seeping from his head. This was the first time he had experienced the full on brutality of the poor, his upraising cushioned by a constant supply of money, unaware of the evil that takes place on this planet. The waves rolled on.



Delusion

[cafolini]

He had wanted to go to California for years, the urge had suddenly taken over and after falling in love with the picturesque beaches and foaming seas he had moved there. Regretting nothing and leaving all family behind he had never expected this; a medley of fear and drowsiness that he could not control. Money was the goal, violence was the medium. No remorse was shown in the quick and brutal attack and it had hit him hard. Totally unaware of what was going on, he had hit the floor and blacked out, his empty wallet thrown next to him and blood seeping from his head. This was the first time he had experienced the full on brutality of the poor, his upraising cushioned by a constant supply of money, unaware of the evil that takes place on this planet. The waves rolled on.

I think it could have happened anywhere and could have been anyone, rich or poor, highly educated or not. As to the evil, it's a belief.

[Delusion]

I think it could have happened anywhere and could have been anyone, rich or poor, highly educated or not. As to the evil, it's a belief.

Could you explain your post a little further, I'm not too certain of the meaning behind it, is it a suggestion or are you putting forward your opinion?

[hillwalker]

I'm assuming cafolini thinks your story is portraying California in a poor light, or describing poor people as violent stereo-types...

I didn't get any of that from your piece - it's a snapshot of a stranger in a beautiful land suddenly being given a rather brutal reality check. I quite enjoyed it but it is rather short. But it has potential for expansion.

H

[Delusion]

I'm assuming cafolini thinks your story is portraying California in a poor light, or describing poor people as violent stereo-types...

I didn't get any of that from your piece - it's a snapshot of a stranger in a beautiful land suddenly being given a rather brutal reality check. I quite enjoyed it but it is rather short. But it has potential for expansion.

H
You're exactly right, he's been brought up with a cushioned life and can only see beauty in the things he does.