Appy for job, Opinion cv and cover letter.

[zoolane]

I am apply for job. Can hints what leave out or change words would grateful.


Cover Letter.


3rd of October 2011
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am enquiring about the position you advertise on Directgov/jobs, the reference is MCC/20935. I have live in Grangetown for seven year and have 3 daughters. Two girls are in secondary school and youngest is primary still. Few years back I did some volunteering for Cleveland Fire Support, which I help with presentations in schools;colleges and community centres. I also help give information to public which help with promote public awareness.


I am eagerer to get back into work after such long time of looking after my family. I can bring qualities to job like are Getting on with anyone; non judgemental; hard worker; loyalty; friend; trustworthy; easy to talk to and great listener. As parent have development my carer nature; to think on my feet also notice when all is not right with person health.
I am eagerer to learn; help my local community in provide good care and friendly support. I loving readied; chatting about all sort topics and travel about area.


I would be great for chance to show you as qualities and be consider for the position.
Your sincerely.
Miss J. Brisley.

[MystyrMystyry]

October 3 2011


Dear Sir,


I am enquiring about the position you have advertised on Directgov/jobs. The reference is MCC/20935.


I have lived in Grangetown for seven years and have 3 daughters. Two are in secondary school and the youngest is in primary. I am a volunteer for The Cleveland Fire Support, in which I help with presentations in schools, colleges and community centres. I also supply information to the public helping promote public awareness.


I am eager to return to work after a long time of caring for my family. The qualities I can bring to the job include being personable and non judgemental; hard working and loyal; trustworthy and easy to talk to. As a parent I have developed my carer nature. I am able to think on my feet and notice when all is not right with a person's health.


I am eager to learn, and to help my local community to provide good care and friendly support. I love to read (I'm not sure what you mean here - I am prepared ? I have read up on the area ?); chatting about all sorts of topics regarding the area.


I would be grateful for the chance to show you my qualities and be considered for the position.


Your sincerely.


Miss J. Brisley

[zoolane]

THANK YOU MM, ONE REFERENCE DONE AND ONE TO GO. SORRY CAPS.

The position is for home care assistant, where you met lots elderly people in their homes and going places with them.


That I inclue the bit readed and traveling.

[hillwalker]

MM has done a great job there for you, zoo. In light of what you say you could change the 'I love to read' sentence to something along the lines of :

I enjoy keeping up to date with the local news and feel this knowledge allows me to interact more easily will members of my community.

Good luck

H

[zoolane]

Thank you MM and Hill. In process of send a email as I am typing.

[zoolane]

I have a interview next wednesday at 10am. Two positions are avialable not one I was going for but nevermind a job is a job.

[hillwalker]

Well done - best of luck

H

[Buh4Bee]

Zoo- Good luck. The letter must have done the trick. Before I got my present job, I practiced interviewing ahead of time. If you can, I'd recommend trying it. You'll feel more relaxed and confident. Food for thought! Thumbs up to you!