Moth Flame

[Dark Muse]

Moth Flame

Have I sacrificed enough
as you have siphoned off
bits of my soul.

Drawn into the dark
allure which lingers
around in curls of smoke
which caught in the right
light waver serpents tails.

The succulent temptation
offered in the redemption
that may found when I
fling myself at your feet.

That I would allow to you
a sanctity denied all others,
there was never any escaping
the penetration of your eyes.

There is no escape
from your moth like
beauty that vacillates
between life and death,
flame and shadow.

For this I bypassed
all the signs, and I leapt
full force into your abysmal
delight.

[MystyrMystyry]

Amazing Dark One :)

[Bar22do]

dripping with poetic sensuality... though, is not "moth" motive already used up a bit?

[Dark Muse]

dripping with poetic sensuality... though, is not "moth" motive already used up a bit?

I will not shy away from something that I feel is truly imperative to my poem because I fear that it has been used before, but I will instead strive to use it in a way that is unique to me.

Originality comes not from doing what no one else has done (which is virtually impossible) but making what you do completely your own.

[Bar22do]

Dark, I didn't mean to hurt your feelings, I'm just used to your original, great imagery and only found moth a little less original. I love reading your sensuous poetry that has such a definite Dark-Muse voice. Don't shy away from anything authentic for you and let me also express what I feel as I read you. Hope it's a fair deal. :wave: Very best to you. Bar

[Dark Muse]

Dark, I didn't mean to hurt your feelings, I'm just used to your original, great imagery and only found moth a little less original. I love reading your sensuous poetry that has such a definite Dark-Muse voice. Don't shy away from anything authentic for you and let me also express what I feel as I read you. Hope it's a fair deal. :wave: Very best to you. Bar

No offence taken, I just have a personal infatuation with moths and I do have a habbit at times of being a bit defensive over my poetry. When people do question particular aspects of my work I feel I should explain my reasoning behind why I have written something in the way I did.

[Bar22do]

Thanks for your words and explanation. I believe we all tend to be defensive at times, it's being h u m a n ! ! ! and had I known of your infatuation for moths... anyway, glad you don't feel hurt!
Again, my very best to you, Bar

[Delta40]

All of your poetry is succulent and sensual! Do you think penetration would flow better instead of penetrating?

[Dark Muse]

All of your poetry is succulent and sensual! Do you think penetration would flow better instead of penetrating?

Thank you I think in my head, I was thinking of adding another word in there, something along the lines of penetrating stare, or gaze, or some such, but the thought got lost in translation between my brain and the page. But penetration would also work.

[Delta40]

My pleasure. I only wish I could churn out something as seductive as this DM but I've learned to appreciate that we all have a unique voice.