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MystyrMystyry
08-30-2011, 08:52 PM
The Blooble blooms around midnight
For those unaware it gives quite a fright -
As the thorns grow long and razor sharp
The sound it emits is not like a harp -
It mumbles and mutters in mad muted tones
Harmonica-like sweeps down to pulsating drones
Beneath the full moon it begins to uproot
Then goes on a rampage looking for loot
It wants old bones to feather its nest
But if old can't be found - well you can guess the rest
Flapping its leaves in the chill Winter breeze
And next it starts hopping and leaping with ease
Jumping about like a crazy person indeed
Until out of breath so calms down does this weed
Though don't call it that for it has a short fuse
To tempt its temper I wouldn't choose
Lest it leave nasty scratches and even dismember -
It's not from around these parts you must remember;
When its gleaming blue petals flash run far away
And barricade yourself inside a barn full of hay
Which for some obscure reason will shut it down tight
Where it shall reroot itself until the following night

Delta40
08-30-2011, 09:18 PM
Imaginative as always.

These lines seem rather bumpy.

Jumping about like a crazy person indeed
Until out of breath so calms down does this weed

and it is a shame the last four lines end in 'ay'

MystyrMystyry
08-30-2011, 09:45 PM
Thanks Delta

The bumpiness was supposed to be humour - but you're right, it is a bit weak

The reason the last four all share the same rhyme is because apparently that's how you're supposed to end a verse - I'm not happy with it, and when I wake up I'll give it an edit

(Actually I was just trying to find a rhythm for something that's going to rock your little cotton socks - but haven't found it yet :( )

Delta40
08-30-2011, 09:47 PM
I didn't know you're supposed to end a verse like that. I wonder why?...

hillwalker
08-31-2011, 05:55 AM
The reason the last four all share the same rhyme is because apparently that's how you're supposed to end a verse.

If you read that in some book on 'How to Write Poetry' I suggest you throw it away - or better still, burn it.

H :-)

MystyrMystyry
08-31-2011, 06:05 AM
Nah - someone said it on these here poetry threads recently. As it was past my beddy byes I thought it would be fun to do and see the response

Bar22do
09-01-2011, 02:03 AM
so my response is with hill and delta, but I like your unrestrainted imagination, always.

MystyrMystyry
09-01-2011, 02:19 AM
Thanks Bar22do :)