Kublai 9/11

[Delta40]

Anchorless men caught in the rip
of eternal tides of history.
Salty moisture wafts upward
and evaporates into a swirling typhoon
Divine Wind
Kamikaze! they cry
Thousands perish in the crumbling horror
as Mongolian ships splinter into matchsticks.
Disaster spreads through us like gallons of fuel.
Here, a man's hopes of living are capsized
or flung desperately from the 88th floor.
Flotsam and jetsam survivors of catastrophe
struggle to remain afloat.
As reality pancakes around them,
the resounding aftermath fractures us
like a tsunami of Samurai swords.

[MystyrMystyry]

Good, and solid from beginning to end

At the moment I'm not sure about Bam! but I'll read it again later and see

Virtually every line is a poem unto itself

[qimissung]

Your writing is forceful and vigorous as usual, Delta.

[Delta40]

Thanks to you both. Dare I reveal the inspiration for this?

[Delta40]

bump!

[Bar22do]

you could, to me (I mean reveal the inspiration) - good writing

[blank|verse]

The way the narratives are intertwined, leaving the reader unsure exactly what is being addressed is very well achieved, and means the poem is speaking about these individual catastrophes, but also others like them.

I wasn't so sure about the rather lighthearted puns about people dying - like how their lives are 'capsized', and reality 'pancaking' - and thought they struck the wrong note. But it's still a breathtaking ride of a poem.

[Delta40]

The way the narratives are intertwined, leaving the reader unsure exactly what is being addressed is very well achieved, and means the poem is speaking about these individual catastrophes, but also others like them.

I wasn't so sure about the rather lighthearted puns about people dying - like how their lives are 'capsized', and reality 'pancaking' - and thought they struck the wrong note. But it's still a breathtaking ride of a poem.

Thanks Bar and BV. I didn't see those lines as lighthearted puns at all but in tune with the disasters I was referring to. Nevertheless, thanks for your insight.

[qimissung]

Was it the use of the words "capsize" and "pancakes" themselves that seemed lighthearted, B/V? I t didn't seem that way to me.