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Twota
08-12-2011, 06:16 PM
He crawls on bed beside his prey
hissing ''I love you'' in her ears,
his warm body wraps hers tightly
like a burial shroud covering a corpse,
his fangs reach for her bare neck
to bite and inject the ecstasy venom,
she moans as the fangs penetrate her skin
and feels the poison running through her veins,
her body relaxes and her eyes get so blurry,
he starts to devour her slowly from head to toe
until he has had his fill,
he then throws out what's left,
scrawny, naked and covered in his saliva
she lies on the bed, falls into a deep sleep
with a sense of guilt, disgust and satisfaction.

Delta40
08-12-2011, 06:31 PM
Not buying this! Lillith is the world's first feminist Twota She left Adam because she wouldn't put up with his crap....(you're hurting my feelings lol)

Twota
08-12-2011, 06:37 PM
hahaa, Yah read about that now :D well changed the title but but what about the content? ;o

Delta40
08-12-2011, 06:42 PM
Content is ok. Replace blur with blurry. head to toes with from head to toe. Until he has had his fill.
But I'm still upset :-) I love Lillith....

Twota
08-12-2011, 06:46 PM
aww, I love Lilith too <3 forgive me :3

Delta40
08-12-2011, 06:47 PM
awww ok! Nice avatar of her.

Twota
08-12-2011, 06:50 PM
yah beautiful, Adam was lucky but he screwed, just like all men. :D

Delta40
08-12-2011, 06:54 PM
I just started a general chat thread to see what other people's views are. You're an inspiration Twota!

Twota
08-12-2011, 06:56 PM
bwahaha, yay me. *proud*

ucello
08-14-2011, 08:21 AM
I'm definitely in favor of Lilith! and agree with Delta. Just as well you changed the title. With D's corrections it'll be a lush poem.

Twota
08-14-2011, 09:04 AM
thanks ucello. :D