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MystyrMystyry
08-10-2011, 08:39 PM
Hiking through the Magnificent Forest
Spy a glinting in the crunchy dappled carpet
A silver disc with inscription
Tarnished and covered in leaf rot
I rub it clean
Mist rises slow
Then gathers pace
Faster and thicker until
I can't see my thumbs

Nor fingers

Then
As sudden as it appeared
It dissipates
And in its place
A figure
With a fire-like aspect
Standing tall

Hello! I blurt
As I am spooked
By the apparition

It regards me
With firey gleam in its eye

You called? it says

Not that I know...

Then who?

There's only me
As far as I'm aware
But I don't think we're on the same page
So
Am ready to hotfoot
Because
For homicidal psychosis
I'm not in the mood

Who are you? I ask
To discern the danger level
With itchy bootsoles

Name? Or occupation?

Both

Jeg, it replies
The Genie of the Disc
Guardian of the Forest

Well that explains the fire business

I think you're lost
The desert's that way

Not lost - home
In my forest

I'm not sure fire and forests are-

Similar?

That's one word
Compatible is another
Wise comes to mind...

What's your point?

Well, you know, fire and wood..?

What are you suggesting?

Return to the desert where you belong!

As you wish, Master

And in a flash it is gone

Relieved
I look around for the disc
Which must have dropped

But to no avail


Hang on - Master??

MystyrMystyry
08-11-2011, 07:03 AM
Personally I thought this was rather good

hillwalker
08-11-2011, 08:53 AM
Honestly?

It's a simple joke stretched beyond its limit. No doubt some will chuckle at the scenario, the 'itchy bootsoles' and that closing line - but I'm still finding it difficult to understand why you class this attempt at a screenplay as poetry.

H

everyadventure
08-11-2011, 09:43 AM
I think this one belongs in the short story forum. It's amusing, I liked the line "nor fingers" by itself :)

MystyrMystyry
08-12-2011, 08:48 PM
Thankyou hillwalker

MystyrMystyry
08-12-2011, 08:49 PM
Thankyou every :)

ucello
08-14-2011, 08:09 AM
Perhaps not really a poem, but a source of enjoyment.

MystyrMystyry
08-16-2011, 10:17 AM
Thankyou ucello - I think it's still in progress

Delta40
08-16-2011, 05:25 PM
I have always admired your imagination but I agree that this is witty dialogue and could be even be developed into a short story. I have no doubt that you would be equally amazing to read in that forum as you are in this one Mystyr!

MystyrMystyry
08-19-2011, 09:24 PM
Thankyou Delta :)