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echo75
08-10-2011, 02:43 PM
To love you mean, we
stand in the red sands, Hell's Edan
freely and souless.
Red-Headed
08-10-2011, 03:12 PM
To love you mean, we
stand in the red sands, Hell's Edan
freely and souless.

Nice haiku. I think you mean 'Eden' though.
Bar22do
08-10-2011, 03:43 PM
Should be 'Eden'. Plus, add an "s" to mean and erase the first comma. Then it's a nice haiku. :)
Delta40
08-10-2011, 05:32 PM
Agree with the above!