HopefulMrRanger
08-08-2011, 11:37 AM
Hello! Any comments, criticism and questions are wanted! The 2 last poems were written a few months ago, but I haven't posted them.
I saw you:
Every night I used to see you.
The one I loved.
We were never together.
My vision of you faded.
You left my sight.
Now I see nobody.
Collapse:
The room is caving,
his reality has been exposed.
He found out of his futile situation
and the mental charade is up.
Going back to reality will be hard
but it is an inevitable sacrifice.
Doctors can't expose it,
not even the best specialist.
The tortutous part about his situation
is nobody will ever know,
except for him.
As he moves on he is forgetting something.
Something he's kept deep inside.
Something he knows but chose to forgot
as it would ruin the dream
but he moves on.
The Choice:
There I sit,
stumbling in the dark
then I see a man in a chair
he turns on the light
and gives me a choice,
2 pills,
One will restore the darkness and I can continue stumbling.
The second will turn on the light,
permanently,
I will be exposed to pain and suffering,
but I will experience pure bliss.
I think, Red or Blue,
How can ignorance be compared to bliss?
I choose, the path less taken,
the light turns off and I sink back into the dirt. I haven't regretted the decision.
Yet.
I saw you:
Every night I used to see you.
The one I loved.
We were never together.
My vision of you faded.
You left my sight.
Now I see nobody.
Collapse:
The room is caving,
his reality has been exposed.
He found out of his futile situation
and the mental charade is up.
Going back to reality will be hard
but it is an inevitable sacrifice.
Doctors can't expose it,
not even the best specialist.
The tortutous part about his situation
is nobody will ever know,
except for him.
As he moves on he is forgetting something.
Something he's kept deep inside.
Something he knows but chose to forgot
as it would ruin the dream
but he moves on.
The Choice:
There I sit,
stumbling in the dark
then I see a man in a chair
he turns on the light
and gives me a choice,
2 pills,
One will restore the darkness and I can continue stumbling.
The second will turn on the light,
permanently,
I will be exposed to pain and suffering,
but I will experience pure bliss.
I think, Red or Blue,
How can ignorance be compared to bliss?
I choose, the path less taken,
the light turns off and I sink back into the dirt. I haven't regretted the decision.
Yet.