Fan

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Large powerful fan
shaking his electric face
negating my thoughts,

a circular cage -
ventosity unchallenged
from his moving head.

While he just squats there
in his cave of Aeolus
whining that old song -

seeming to blow strange
cryptic anemometers
speeding in my mind.

[yuka]

Novel and special imagination, maybe something strange slipped into your red head. :)

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Novel and special imagination, maybe something strange slipped into your red head. :)

Probably. :)

[Delta40]

This haiku chain flowed much better, probably because each seemed less broken up in mid sentence this time. Nice imagery Red.

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This haiku chain flowed much better, probably because each seemed less broken up in mid sentence this time. Nice imagery Red.

Well, it's really a poem in the shape of a haiku chain more than anything else.

[firefangled]

What I liked about this more than the form was the interesting twist to give the fan animation and the observer a passive role seemingly dependent on the fan for movement. Also, the fan is given a gender and, in that sense, more of a presense than N. It's a bit Beckettian (if there is such a word).

I'm not so taken with your use of haiku (if it can be called haiku). I believe that 17 syllables does not a haiku make. There are other considerations like theme, for example. However, I am not a haiku expert.

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What I liked about this more than the form was the interesting twist to give the fan animation and the observer a passive role seemingly dependent on the fan for movement. Also, the fan is given a gender and, in that sense, more of a presense than N. It's a bit Beckettian (if there is such a word).

I'm not so taken with your use of haiku (if it can be called haiku). I believe that 17 syllables does not a haiku make. There are other considerations like theme, for example. However, I am not a haiku expert.

Yeah, I often just use a link-poem of the basic form of the seventeen syllables. That's the only thing it has in common with a haiku proper. I also write actual haiku/haiku chains, although no one seems to be able to tell the difference.

[Delta40]

Yeah, I often just use a link-poem of the basic form of the seventeen syllables. That's the only thing it has in common with a haiku proper. I also write actual haiku/haiku chains, although no one seems to be able to tell the difference.

A haiku/haiku chain?

http://i1108.photobucket.com/albums/h411/delta40/dunce-cap-300x225.jpg

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A haiku/haiku chain?

They were popular in the 18th century.