Driving Force

[Delta40]

The window sash was jammed
when he slipped out of bed and crept away.
I pretended sleep until the door closed
and loneliness embraced me like a familiar teddy.
His engine spluttered to life in the early dawn
then slowly reversed down the driveway.
I suddenly leapt to the window,
desperate to fling it open and cry out to him,
Come back! Don't leave!
but it was wedged shut from years of squalid solitude.
I stood there, naked,
hands and face pressed against the cold glass,
drowning in my homespun pain as he withdrew.
For a single moment, I hoped there was hope
when his headlights dazzled my bared anguish
but he roared away to join the rest of the traffic.

[Twota]

I like it lots -like always-, I love line 4. :D

[everyadventure]

Hm. I got the feeling from this poem that he was not running off to a lover, but was just leaving to go to work. And if the poem is read that way, it captures a sort of daily despair that is even more devastating because it is an unrelenting loneliness. A housewife's lament?

Am I totally off base here?

[Delta40]

Hm. I got the feeling from this poem that he was not running off to a lover, but was just leaving to go to work. And if the poem is read that way, it captures a sort of daily despair that is even more devastating because it is an unrelenting loneliness. A housewife's lament?

Am I totally off base here?

not bad...or what if she picks up men regularly hoping that by sleeping with them, one will 'decide' to stay with her?

[MystyrMystyry]

There's only one way to get a bloke to stay Delta - find the right one ;) (Most of the blokes I know you wouldn't want to stick around - I don't even want them visiting me!)

I like

but it was wedged shut from years of squalid solitude

(Good ring to it)

[Delta40]

There's only one way to get a bloke to stay Delta - find the right one ;) (Most of the blokes I know you wouldn't want to stick around - I don't even want them visiting me!)

I like

but it was wedged shut from years of squalid solitude

(Good ring to it)

Now this is an example of assuming the poem is autobiographical (and thanks for the advice btw!) If I had not read Shadows The Steps That Walked the Earth, I would not have noticed this so much

Thanks anyway ;)