Neptune

[MystyrMystyry]

Adrift on a rolling ocean
In a broken refrigerator
With an old sheet for a sail
As a storm breaks
Old Neptune appears
Demanding what the Hell am I thinking!
'You'll get drowned!'
I ask him what he's talking about
He mutters something about seaworthiness
To which I respond my fridge is secure
But it needs to be fixed
He eyes me quizzically
Summons a merepairmaid to take a look
Who inquires whether the light stays on when I close the door
Haven't tried this, because it's a boat
Not a submarine
Though I get the point that she seems to be making
Better to be under the waves
During a storm at sea
Then getting queasy above
It occurs to me that she may not be a qualified mertradesmaid
Hey, Poseidon!
Ignores me
Neptune!
'What?'
Could you do something about the weather?
'Like..?'
Could you ease up on it?
A puzzlement melts over his bearded countenance
Very pleasant before you turned up - no offence
'None taken'
Where are you going?
'Storms follow'
Oh, I see
Could you leave the mer-..?

Unfortunately she went too

[everyadventure]

I found this to be a delightful adventure, although I'm confused about what happened at the end...

"Merepairmaid!" Ha! :D

[Delta40]

This was a wonderful, imaginative read Mystyr. I love how alot of your poetry is not age specific. I know little children as much as us adults will enjoy this! A true gift indeed.

[MystyrMystyry]

Thanks every - you're only confused by the end? The whole thing confused me ;) I was trying to say (succinctly) Neptune brought the storm, and then left with it, while it was actually his consort who brought the storm (then I thought oops too much detail, and scratched the last four lines)

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou Delta - I try to be understood (I do - I try! Honest!). This is sort of being at a loss (all at sea) and feeling the pressures (the storm) and wanting a god to step in and take some responsibility for the mess - or just lighten up and leave me in my original muddle without making everything go Kersplosh!

:)

[ucello]

What an imagination. I see it published for children, illustrated, though certainly not dependent on illustration. It is as pictorial as it is so well said.

[tailor STATELY]

One of the most endearing trips through your imagination that I have read.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou ucello

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou tailor STATELY (may I use your name in a novel I'm writing?) :)

[qimissung]

Charming!

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou Qimi :)

[Bar22do]

This is incredibly imaginative and dynamic! A ride on a fridge -what an adventure. Enjoyed it through. Bravo.

[tailor STATELY]

Thankyou tailor STATELY (may I use your name in a novel I'm writing?)

LOL. In a positive vein I would hope. I'd be honored.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[tetyanaroi]

What's an incredible imagination!!! I like this poem:-)))

[MystyrMystyry]

We'll see tailor :) - I'm only a few pages in and it may be beyond my scope, especially at the moment with all the other busy-ness I've got going on...

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou tetyanaroi :)

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou Bar22do. I'm afraid I didn't see your comment earlier, though I'm glad you enjoyed it :)