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Twota
08-01-2011, 08:56 PM
Asphalt Breath

A hot sunny day
The asphalt exhales warm breath
We wear wrinkled frowns.
Delta40
08-01-2011, 09:00 PM
The last line has 6 syllables but I still like it.
Twota
08-01-2011, 09:15 PM
Oh! Peo-ple, right. :D

I 'll make it ''we'' ;o

Glad you like it Delta ;D
everyadventure
08-01-2011, 11:56 PM
I like this, but WHY do I like this? I just can't say. I simply like it!
Jack of Hearts
08-02-2011, 01:20 AM
Economy is doing you wonders Twota.






J
Red-Headed
08-02-2011, 01:38 AM
I like it.
Twota
08-02-2011, 08:49 AM
I like this, but WHY do I like this? I just can't say. I simply like it!
hahaa, thank you EA, most important thing is that you like it. :D


Economy is doing you wonders Twota.






J
LOL, yes I guess :D thanks Jack. :)


I like it.
Thanks Red. :D
Twota
08-02-2011, 12:45 PM
Cruel winter wind
thin bare soiled shoulders shiver
arms embrace bent knees.
Twota
08-02-2011, 01:43 PM
Live a booming life
step on others for your good
and in time be damned.
Delta40
08-02-2011, 07:59 PM
I like Cruel Wind (I'm not a great haiku fan)
Twota
08-02-2011, 08:08 PM
hahaa, I figured recently. :D glad you like it tho. :D

and and I am almost done with a new poem! it will be here in any minute now, actually your previous poem kinda inspired me, be proud. :P
Delta40
08-02-2011, 08:21 PM
okay. I will!