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[Delta40]

You posture sanctimony like prose
but I am callous to this dribbling stance.
I'd rather shed my feelings
into a bowl of rotting fruit
and let them fester on the brown spots
than concede you are right.

[Twota]

I always ''shed my feelings
into a bowl of rotting fruit
and let them fester on the brown spots''
before I concede my mum is right. :D
I like it. :)

[PrinceMyshkin]

There is such authority in this! You are getting better and better at saying much in a little space.

[Delta40]

There is such authority in this! You are getting better and better at saying much in a little space.

plenteous authority
teeny wisdom

[MystyrMystyry]

Delta in paradoxical paragraphical. Even after all these months you continue to astonish me :)

[Junglord]

Good stuff, Nice simple and short, nice vocab used in this one, some lovely sounding words like 'callous' and 'sanctimony'. Keep writing!

[everyadventure]

Why should we concede when we are always right? That's how I feel about it, anyhow! ;)

[S.Daedalus]

i got a kick out of "sanctimony like prose"

[Jack of Hearts]

There's honesty in this and great use of language. Perhaps synthetic, this reader still wonders who or what the antagonist was.







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