Isabele

[ShadowsCool]

-Isabel-

Had a vision of my overseas belle
She with me and I was her fella;
Yet even comely skies could not deliver
The charm that lay in my Isabella.

I wandered on steep hills to catch a glimpse
On fairway greens her name I would yell;
Yet even stormy skies could not deliver
My starry-eyed maiden I call Isabel.

I gazed a last time from the chapel heights
Opining to heaven: there may I one day dwell?
Over the sea beyond my distant dreams
To that isle that hide my beautiful Isabel.

[Junglord]

Has an atmosphere to this one for sure. Really enticing write. My favourite line: "I gazed a last time from the chapel heights"

[Varenne Rodin]

I like the variations of name forms. There's a lot going on for it being not overly long.

[Jack of Hearts]

It's got a folk-song ring to it but some of it was clumsy to read. Wouldn't discard this one, though- in this reader's opinion a heavy revision could be very fruitful.







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