Phalanx

[Red-Headed]

Brief summer downpour
crystal raindrops on mown grass -
a phalanx of ants.

[Delta40]

Haiku just doesn't do it for me. It feels like you are limited by the 5/7/5 principle

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

I kind of agree. It's good, but it's just not enough to work with. Isn't there a longer version than a haiku, something with 5 lines?

[Hawkman]

There are a couple of special threads for haiku in the poetry games and competitions sub-forum. You might want to check them out. As haiku go this one's OK I suppose, but it would be nice to see some other forms from you too.

Live and be well - H

[Red-Headed]

There are a couple of special threads for haiku in the poetry games and competitions sub-forum. You might want to check them out. As haiku go this one's OK I suppose, but it would be nice to see some other forms from you too.

Live and be well - H

OK, thanks for the information. Sometimes my haiku work, sometimes they don't. I have other poems in other forms, although I tend to post them in my blog here first.

[Red-Headed]

I kind of agree. It's good, but it's just not enough to work with. Isn't there a longer version than a haiku, something with 5 lines?

There is the tanka ~ 5/7/5/7/7 lines, & you can always link haiku/senryu, in fact there have been linked forms for centuries.