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Delta40
07-29-2011, 09:07 AM
He decomposes under green lush
as thunder rolls across the sky
rumbling its displeasure.
I clutch flowering yellow weeds
while powerful magnetic forces
wrench him through the sodden earth
toward the mouth of his own tragedy.
The old gum tree is struck by lightning
and cracks the strongest branch in two.
Now we are truly separate, I chew the eucalyptus.
In this wilderness of awe
I wonder if the funk of my hatred
is equally putrid to the substance his corpse excretes.
Goodbye I cry
when he is sucked into the vortex
to live out an eternity of wrath.
Only the maggots remain as leftover reminders.
When the storm disappears,
warm rays engulf me.
Like a forgiving angel
the micro life wriggling at my feet dry up
and every weed is suddenly a rose.
With renewed strength
I let him go
and write off the cost of his tuxedo

Red-Headed
07-29-2011, 09:42 AM
Good 'concrete' write.

hillwalker
07-29-2011, 10:24 AM
The ending is particularly memorable

- every weed is suddenly a rose brings some hope,
followed by that darkly humorous touch of closure regarding the loss of the tuxedo.

H

Mutatis-Mutandis
07-29-2011, 10:28 AM
Awesome poem. Love the imagery, especially:

In this wilderness of awe
I wonder if the funk of my hatred
is equally putrid to the substance his corpse excretes.

everyadventure
07-29-2011, 10:32 AM
Resurrection at its creepiest. Adios, sucker.

Delta40
07-29-2011, 12:32 PM
My dark side just woke up :-)

Hawkman
07-29-2011, 12:37 PM
Delta the Sith - Nice! Helluva way to say goodbye though, better than Elijah's fiery chariot!

Great imagery - H

MystyrMystyry
07-29-2011, 02:48 PM
Outrageous! Egregious! Simultaneous!


Deltorious!

Twota
07-29-2011, 04:51 PM
I feel little stupid as I don't quite understand it while all the above seem to fully do so, however as far as I understand, I like it lots. :D

Delta40
07-29-2011, 10:36 PM
I feel little stupid as I don't quite understand it while all the above seem to fully do so, however as far as I understand, I like it lots. :D

It's an accumulation of conversations I had coupled with the squally weather here in Perth. Just plain old fashioned macabre imagination really

Mutatis-Mutandis
07-29-2011, 10:43 PM
I feel little stupid as I don't quite understand it while all the above seem to fully do so, however as far as I understand, I like it lots. :D
I don't understand all of it. I don't think I've ever read a poem in which I have, barring Shel Silverstein. I read poetry more for the evocation of emotion and imagery--too much analysis can take away from the experience, in my opinion.

Delta40
07-29-2011, 10:46 PM
I don't understand all of it. I don't think I've ever read a poem in which I have, barring Shel Silverstein. I read poetry more for the evocation of emotion and imagery--too much analysis can take away from the experience, in my opinion.

Well said Mutatis. Recently there was a member who required a detailed explanation of each poem I posted and I felt that by doing so or 'dumbing it down' for his benefit really detracted from the potential broad interpretations that each unique reader will discover.