Death and Oreos

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

“Death and Oreos”

No good can I see in the world
Death and despair
Rape and murder
Sickness and famine
(Oreos on sale this week)
Three soldiers killed in a car bomb
Oreos sound good, come to think of it.

[zhannochka]

Is the lack of punctuation intended to make the reader flow their thoughts on without specific regard to a single thought?

:)

[Hawkman]

It's that old theme of news and breakfast and the indifference of the preoccupied mind with events with which there is no personal connection, ie the majority of the population. Although perhaps this is not particularly original ground to cover, you have done so effectively. Maybe we need to be reminded every so often.

The way the poem is laid out with the individual thoughts confined to seperate lines, a long succession of commas or semi-colons would have been superfluous. The poem contains all the punctuation it needs.

Live long and prosper - H

[Delta40]

I think a glass of milk will go just fine with this poem...

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

Thanks, everyone!

I posted some poems of mine on here a while ago, and also on Facebook. This seems to always be the favorite.

It's that old theme of news and breakfast and the indifference of the preoccupied mind with events with which there is no personal connection, ie the majority of the population. Although perhaps this is not particularly original ground to cover, you have done so effectively. Maybe we need to be reminded every so often.
I knew when I wrote this I was not covering any new ground, but it was one of those poems that was written from true inspiration (something that doesn't happen for me too often, which is why I rarely write poetry--if it's forced, it's usually crap, by my own standards). I was watching the news and then saw the commercials--though, not particularly for Oreos. It came to me and I just had to get it down.

As for no punctuation, it's just how I wrote it, really. When I write a poem, I don't really think about it and rarely go back to edit, because sometimes I can over think things. Still, I was always taught that you pause after a line, so I wrote it with that in mind.

[everyadventure]

Very, very good. Yes, it's an old theme, but so is love, and somehow there's always something new to say about it. Flows wonderfully, thanks for sharing.

[YesNo]

I didn't know you wrote poetry, Mutatis-Mutandi.

Regarding the poem, it is nice to find something good in the world if one looks close enough.

[zhannochka]

I do like it without punctuation. I find I read it very quickly and without much thought to a single line in particular... Just the way the world is presented to us sometimes these days!

[Junglord]

This is a great poem. I love it. My eyes glued upon "(Oreos on sale this week)" more than any of the other phrases which is exactly what the poem is about. Great read, I enjoyed.

[BienvenuJDC]

hmmm...and I just put an Oreo cheesecake in the oven....for real!!

[Varenne Rodin]

Oreo centers aren't made mainly of milk fats, they're primarily rendered cow fat. I haven't been able to eat them since I learned of this. I had an esoteric reaction to your poem! :D

[Calidore]

Oreo centers aren't made mainly of milk fats, they're primarily rendered cow fat. I haven't been able to eat them since I learned of this. I had an esoteric reaction to your poem! :D

Conversely, my opinion of them just went up, because I had no idea there was anything natural about them whatsoever.

[inbetween]

I like those chocolate oreos best...
but the poem is brilliant... made me laugh and shows perfectly what it's like.. I mean most of us all know how.. well .. how wretched this world is and the fact that we can't do anything but our little share.. what can't help with the knews... where we see all those horrible things.. the world. that makes us think of oreos.... they are more plesant to think about and since we can't do much about that awfull knews we'd better think of oreos... in that way it's not funny but painful... the mixture this world is made of......

I like it

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

Thank you very much, inbetween.

And I did not know that was the contents of the white stuff. I don't think I'll stop eating them though--stuff like that rarely bothers me.

[Varenne Rodin]

Conversely, my opinion of them just went up, because I had no idea there was anything natural about them whatsoever.

Haha. Well, I hate to mention, but it's chemically processed and plasticized. :D

Still loved the poem.

[Calidore]

Next you'll be telling me there's natural ingredients in Twinkies, when I think we all know that the expiration date on the package should actually be a half-life.

Oh yeah, forgot to say that I liked the poem also.