A Girl

[beautiful_heart]

A Girl
Who is a girl?
She is the one who bears the pain of being called
“burden” on her parents silently since birth.
She cares for her parents by heart, sacrifices the toys
for her brother at a very tender age and one day leaves her sweet home
to make someone else’s house a heaven.

There she meets her “Prince Charming”
But he also differ from her imagination.
Throughout the day she listens to the taunts of her in-laws
And at night serves her spouse in bed.

She bears the labor pains for nine months with the perception
That perhaps her child will understands her someday
But he also abandons her thinking that she has become insane
with her old age.

And one day she dies while praying to god to keep all
her loved ones happy.

[ShadowsCool]

Amrita:

I didn't realize all that. But that angle you took can be true for some woman.
Nice write.

Shadows

[aliengirl]

Very poignant! And what's distressing is that it really happens with some women.

BTW, there are a few grammar related slips. I assume that you've written the poem in present tense. So, in the 5th line "one day lefts her sweet home" must be "one day leaves her sweet home" and in the 1st line of second stanza "met" should be replaced by "meets". In the second last line perhaps "while praying" would be better than "by praying". One more point- how can the house be sweet where she is being treated as a burden?

I hope you won't take all these ideas negatively.
Best wishes. :)

[Twota]

That's a sad perspective for a female's life. :/

But I agree, very poignant. :)

[beautiful_heart]

Michael: Thanks a lot for liking it. Unfortunately, this is the life of most of the girls. Not only in India but all over the world. Its a male-dominating society that we are living in. This is the reason why George Eliot disguised her identity and wrote the books by the name of a man.

Aliengirl: Thanks a lot for editing my poem. I was confused whether to write this poem in past or present tense. That is why i goofed up. But now you have helped me in clearing that dilemma. And her home is sweet because I wrote this poem with the perspective of a girl. I am agree with you that home can't be sweet where she is considered as a burden but still its girl's nature. She bears and still loves everything without complaining about it. :-(

Twota: Thanks a lot buddy for taking out some time to read my poem and commenting on it. I appreciate this. :)

[aliengirl]

Welcome beautiful heart!

Yeah, it is a male dominating society but things have changed a lot since the time of George Eliot. Women no longer need to hide their identity to get published. Cheer up dear!

P.S. This does not mean that things are totally different. Women still face discrimination.