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ShadowsCool
07-26-2011, 06:58 AM
Love Poem 45

I will release my dream into your soul,
Breath softly me and I will come to life.
My ecstasy is the love I rage towards you.
The one who's beauty's was poured out by heaven,
Sent to me by harking angels,
Who's words were prattled upon your lips.

I ablaze in your kiss.
Your radiance sleeps with the highest stars
That pulse my heart.
Where my desire is to lay beside you
Around the aurora that glitters deep my dreams,
To become raptured in your presence
Besides the bright of heaven.

Delta40
07-26-2011, 07:12 AM
what about 'I will release my dream into your soul?'

there are some grammatical errors and although I feel its a bit lovey dovey, that's probably more about me than your ability to put your passion on paper.

beautiful_heart
07-26-2011, 01:05 PM
Michael, I really like this poem especially the starting and the lines quoted below:

"Where my desire is to lay beside you
Around the aurora that glitters deep my dreams." :-)

ShadowsCool
07-26-2011, 01:52 PM
Delta: Good point. My grammar is poor. I think I have a problem with it. I'm trying something to get better. But I'm a romantic at heart. I'm a lovey dovey poet lol.

Amrita: Thanks for reading and liking it.

Twota
07-26-2011, 05:39 PM
I like the second stanza alot. :D