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Twota
07-24-2011, 06:25 PM
The night
pours darkness
into the woods,
I am surrounded
by giant trees,
insects and
none of my race.
Now, It's full
to the brim,
and suddenly,
I am paralysed
looking in his eyes,
cold and blue
like sapphire,
I have to move,
but I am sucked
and drowned
into his gems.
They are everywhere,
now, too many blue gems
staring at my soul,
they hypnotize me
with those wide eyes,
like the sea.
I feel my goodness
being consumed,
and replaced with
coldness and evil.
After few minutes,
I fall down
on my hairy knees,
stand on my four
and howl,
then I gaze
through my new eyes
at my new friends,
they are all humans.
Revolte
07-25-2011, 05:20 AM
I absolutely adore this!!!! Be it my obsession with wolves or distaste for human kind. Wonderful.
Twota
07-25-2011, 06:41 AM
I hope it is the distaste for human kind :D
Thanks Revolte-Wolf :D
hillwalker
07-25-2011, 06:45 AM
A poem about changing into a werewolf presumably - but who is the 'He' whose gem-like eyes the narrator stared into? I lost the thread of the plot somewhere in trying to figure this out.
H
Twota
07-25-2011, 06:48 AM
hmm, a wolf, it's the evil ;o
Delta40
07-25-2011, 06:54 PM
I see that you're saying the narrator became the wolf after staring into its eyes.
Twota
07-25-2011, 07:00 PM
hmm, yaaah in a way, I meant -The night- as the devil, -pours darkness- as evil, -into the woods- as the world, the wolves are the evil humans and I was good until they crossed my way and changed me into one of them, so when I look at them with the new eyes, I see them as humans, while I saw them as wolves with my good eyes? was that clear or I make that up in mind and write too little? :/
Delta40
07-25-2011, 07:05 PM
I simply didn't connect wolves to evil and thought you came across a wolf who in turn transformed you into one and the rest of the pack to human. I guess this poem is about perspective more than anything else.
Twota
07-25-2011, 07:12 PM
hmm. well, with any perspective, hope it's worth reading. :/
Delta40
07-25-2011, 07:13 PM
:) oh smile - It's not the end of the world!
Twota
07-25-2011, 07:17 PM
*smiles a huge smile* :D
hillwalker
07-26-2011, 07:32 AM
The poem's fine - but the perspectives become very muddled because it's obvious you're not even certain yourself what you are trying to tell us (your response #7 is even more nightmarish than the poem).
H
Twota
07-26-2011, 10:28 AM
The poem's fine - but the perspectives become very muddled because it's obvious you're not even certain yourself what you are trying to tell us (your response #7 is even more nightmarish than the poem).
H
The poem is fine! Yay me ;D And I 'll try to make the next ones clearer :D
beautiful_heart
07-26-2011, 12:52 PM
Well... I understand what you mean Twota. Its a nice perception or theme however, I am also failed to understand its ending. I am sorry for that. :-(
Twota
07-26-2011, 05:36 PM
It's ok beautiful :D guess I didn't make it clear enough however, The poet first saw with his good hearted eyes the evil humans as wolves, then when they changed him into one of them and became his friends, he looked through the sapphire like eyes, he saw them as humans, friends. I hope that helps. :)
beautiful_heart
07-27-2011, 02:07 AM
Yeah, I got it now. Human transformed into wolf first but after indulging into wrong things or evils he realised his mistakes. I think this is what you mean. Nice poem. I like it. :-)
Twota
07-27-2011, 05:05 AM
Thanks beautiful, glad you like it. :D
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