Seeing it through

[Jerrybaldy]

I need to feel good, buy me a burger, a beer,
some mcdonalds cheer,
play with me, release me
tell me you love me,
lets play monopoly,
ask me if I am feeling okay.
Let's watch a black and white movie
share my bath, bring petals,
vanilla candles,
I will take the tap end,
I will massage your feet.
Let's bathe in the sun and burn
let's get moles, get old.
I will wipe your arse,
you can wipe the sweat from my pate.
We can forget each other’s names
our pasts, our baths, our aftersun.
I can make you a cup of tea
unsure if you take sugar,
pull up your tights, wipe porridge from your chin.
Side by side, on leather commodes
I will tell you of my wife
and you will tell of your man,
a blink of recognition will spark,
fade out and be gone.

[Twota]

I really like that alot :O
specially: ''I will tell you of my wife
and you will tell of your man,
a blink of recognition will spark,
fade out and be gone.''

[everyadventure]

There's a keen note of desperation in this that you've captured so well. Want me! Need me!

Nicely done, your Baldiness.

[Delta40]

You're the only poet I know that can make dementia sound appealing...

[Jack of Hearts]

Side by side, on leather commodes...

Yuck. Nice.







J

[the facade]

You're the only poet I know that can make dementia sound appealing...

Agreed. This was beautifully disturbing.

[Hawkman]

Hi JB. This rattles along very well, although personally I'd have found a way round all those "I Will"s, but then again it emphasises a marriage vow, doesn't it. I could have done without the scatological reference to arse-wiping, but you never shy away from the wartier side of life in your work. There is some striking imagery in this poem.

Best, H

[everyadventure]

"Let's play monopoly." My favorite line in this poem, and something I'm inclined to take you up on ;) But only if I can be the thimble.

[Jerrybaldy]

thanks all I would have to say re reading that for good or bad this posting is typical bloody jerryesque

[beautiful_heart]

I really like this poem as it starts with the happy note but ends by depicting the pain of old age. Its a beautiful poem. :-)

[Haunted]

The romantic and amoral Jerry. It's such a pleasure to read sir.

[AuntShecky]

Poignant.
(Did I spell that right?)

[PrinceMyshkin]

Poignant.
(Did I spell that right?)

Far as I know, there's only one way to spell "that" and that is the way you spelled it!

[Jerrybaldy]

Don't read this crap , read butter on the harp.