No other

[Jerrybaldy]

Follow me to frigid water
within a white washed lake.
Unable to exhale.
Blue thighs splay,
arrested hearts,
crack crushed ice,
carress your breasts.
Wrap me in your hand,
bite your lip and bleed.
Cry my name,
blaspheme,
drip salt water
leak warm honey.
Orgasm in epilepsy,
murder me in mercy.
Swear to God
no other.

[Jack of Hearts]

Your brand of love needs a mop.

Visceral as ever but startling like jumping into frigid water, this one.






J

[Hopfrog]

Your language is beautiful -- but ye poem depress'd me, as it wears too well the mask of my romantic experience.

[Delta40]

I loved it. Especially orgasm in epilepsy. What erotic convulsive imagery you project Jerry.

[TheodoreK.16]

I loved it! The images you used were SO powerful, I felt as if I was standing right there, well done Jerry



Theodore

[hillwalker]

A JB love poem - telling it like it is. Powerful and painfully frank as ever.

H

[PrinceMyshkin]

That final

Swear to God
no other

has the interesting suggestion that there is blasphemy as we usually understand it, and as in blaspheming against love by betraying or abandoning it. Of course I read the latter in the context of your "H&S" poem and the recent development in your life that you spoke of.

[everyadventure]

Wow. There is such a raw, animalistic beauty in this. And that last sentence! You can almost hear it said through clenched teeth...