The poet and the muse

[Dr.reid_16]

Hey all! Another poem, i'd appreciate it if i could get some input on this one! Thought up on the spot - literally, just wrote it about 2 minutes ago- so, lemme have your thoughts! (:

The poet and the muse


quiet strides in the night,
traveling with you, my muse, is my delight.
Each step we take, the moon is with us,
accompanied by life.

The stars above, glowing with bliss,
are our entertainment for the evening.
This night, is beautiful,
graceful,
inspirational.
For i am the poet,
and you are my muse.

Before the stars close the curtains,
let us stop for a moment.
Together, we shall open our souls,
increase our passion,
and expand our minds.

It is time to attain the unknown,
are you ready?
First, i must grab my pen and pad,
for i am a poet,
and you are my muse.

[Delta40]

well for a quick write its rather good (made my coffee less bitter too!). I'd get rid of delight since it rhymes with night and this poem should be naturally free verse. It resounds with whimsical notions and also a tinge of hope.

I particularly liked: 'Before the stars close the curtains' which is a great way to imagine sunrise.

I wonder if you actually need the last stanza. I say this because it starts to sound a bit technical and doesn't gel with the romanticism of the rest of the poem.

I hope this helps.