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soloIQ
07-16-2011, 12:03 PM
Adam is out
on a hot date
has a good time
until the fruit plate

Eve gets cranky
says ''I'm late
my nipples hurt
and you I hate''

He yells at the cook
''Worst I ever ate!''
she glares in silence
at her lousy mate

He gets on up
feels low rate
she calls him a slob
he mentions her weight

It's not going good
they've sealed our fate
the meal cost too much
and smells like bait

hillwalker
07-16-2011, 01:41 PM
A couple of points -

found this pretty humorous but the repeated rhyme became a little too tiresome by the end

and

I suggest you read the "Please read before posting your poems" thread above. Only one new poem allowed per poster in each 24 hr period to avoid other writers' work being 'bumped' onto the next page before everyone worldwide gets a chance to read and respond.

H