The Field and the Sky

[Jack of Hearts]

I rode my bike to a field last night,
not a single cloud was asleep in the sky;
vast and washed clean,
the field and sky.

I reached into heaven,
my coarse fingers held it
like fabric soaked in cosmic wine,

and, wringing,
threw my head back,
held my throat open wide.

[Delta40]

Reminds me of laying flat on my back and losing myself in the universe but you put that extra magic into the image JoH

[Jack of Hearts]

Thanks for reading, Delta40.






J

[Delta40]

Lets bumpity bump this one to the top of the list!

[hillwalker]

I found the 2nd and 3rd stanzas the most intriguing due to the wonderful extended metaphor - which is why I wonder about the opening of the 1st verse. Do we really need to know you rode your bike??

H

[Jerrybaldy]

Sod it Jack I cannot dislike anything you write

[Twota]

i really like this :D specially ''like fabric soaked in cosmic wine''

[Bar22do]

I take it literally, beyond the metaphor (wonderful): an accident, for no reason? intriguing.

[Jack of Hearts]

Grumpy Grandpa Hill, Whacky Uncle Jerry, Tiny Cousin Twota and Befuddled Godfather Bar, thank you all for putting up with this poet's upchuck.






J